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Effigy Member
since 2000-04-11
Posts 486disbelief 
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elegant dancing shimmers of light reflect from shinny worn remains of less than ballerinas and more spare change rattles like drums beating out rhythms echoing from empty auditorium seats cob web paradise where light shimmers such as shaman dancing to aboriginal drum beats mix into a subversive subcultural ballet melody drifting through cool night air humid and steamy flamingly abstract notes whisper angel soft like young punks terrorizing old ladies with less memories of today then yesterday ballet dance old lady dance [This message has been edited by Effigy (10-15-2002 12:25 AM).] |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
amazing images strewn through this...I hope you don't mind, but it's almost like words have been tossed into a blender with dancing on their mind, and what has come about is what one would see when the blender is at its spin a concoction that is mesmerizing, captivating, but not easily understood, perceived Whether on the shoal or on the shore, |
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WhiteRose Member Elite
since 2002-07-23
Posts 3208somebody's dungeon |
Wow! This is incredible. It is as if the words just danced out onto the page. Wonderful! |
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Effigy Member
since 2000-04-11
Posts 486disbelief |
Thank you. That is in essience the affect that I was going for. It was pure free thought. |
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FuzzyFrazzledFraggle Member
since 2002-09-20
Posts 155Fraggle Rock |
love your style..and such..hrm..brain frazzled..perhaps I should go to bed!? wish I could be more orginal tonight.. Consider yourself fuzzed [This message has been edited by FuzzyFrazzledFraggle (10-23-2002 01:58 AM).] |
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WhileIWasGone Member
since 2002-07-18
Posts 486 |
Beautiful...enjoyed very much. DeaDiAmore |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Wes, reading this two writers come to mind "Burroughs" and "Jim Morrison" this meant as a compliment. Such wonderful vivid images. This one is for the library. Great read.  The ladders of life that we scale merrily Move mysteriously around So that when you think you're climbing up, man In fact you're climbing down-Nick ca |
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forne_marin Member
since 2004-04-13
Posts 140Spartanburg, South Carolina |
This is really good. I like this. I agree with the statement above. It's as if the words were thrown in a blender and came out dancing. The first read through is a little overwhelming, but that's not a critique. That's just a statement, and it can be good or bad. The only negative thing I have to say is that you mispelled "shiny". |
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