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Sardine Run
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Sardine Run |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion 
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Sardine Run Off Africa’s wild coast they run silvery flashes caught in the tide, moving separately, becoming one - dancing school, intricately patterned. In perfect parabolas they run slipstreaming from south to north, cold currents churning up a swell of twirling, frenetic ballerinas. Alongside the Eastern Cape they run efforts to repel attract instead they vanish in a frenzied attack, leaving clouds of scales, a spooky calm. © 2002 Core [This message has been edited by Corinne (12-06-2002 10:56 AM).] |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
In the early morning moon-light, I cast my net into the dark horizon And the dawn Like the gleaming belly of surfacing sardines Leapt from the sea Not onto the land But into a can Corinne....you are becoming, actually, always have been, quite a talented writer.. [This message has been edited by Toerag (12-05-2002 12:16 PM).] |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
like this.. the motion and the images... well done my friend.. well done. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Corinne Nice write, enjoyed the read. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Corinne I always enjoy your poetry. Like Ron, I loved the color and motion in this. |
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Thomas119gold Senior Member
since 2002-06-03
Posts 708Biloxi, MS (city by the sea) |
This is my first chance to read your writing it won't be the last I really enjoyed it Thomas |
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garysgirl 
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Corrine, I liked this. But, I couldn't help but to laugh at the Southern Gentleman's reply. That Toe is something else, isn't he? I must say, though, that I love sardines, and as soon as I saw the title, I thought of that. You, my friend, can make something beautiful even out of something with a terrible smell. I love your talent, Lady.  "Love makes the world go around" ~~with love and hugs from Ethel~~ [This message has been edited by garysgirl (12-05-2002 02:12 PM).] |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Corinne~ I always enjoy your poetry and this is no exception. Very nice imagery in this piece. Nicely done. Hugs, ~Vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (smiles) Oh Corinne, everything you write is so beautiful, sweet friend, I love this, I love watching salmon and all other fish move up and downstream and the rhythms they make! (kiss on cheek) This is lovely, sweet friend, we all love you so much!n You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Corinne, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Thank you Toe, Cpat, Sey, Martie, Thomas, Garysgirl, Vicky and Noah! Did some revisions this morning, hope it's improved! Cor |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
A terrific write... enjoyed the read. Maree  |
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