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Mathematically sleeping |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298
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Her mind refused to equate the darkness and her closed eyes to sleeping as she wrestled the unsolved calculations of her life up to the current date. She took her unhappiness and multiplied it by WhatCouldHaveBeen, but found the resulting figure too large to handle, so she divided it by WishesNeverComeTrueAnyway... but everyone knows what happens when you divide by a negative and now she had not only successfully exponentially notated her quandary but negated it as well. Algebraic training came to her rescue and she simply multiplied the whole thing by her SelfImage. There were still too many variables to define so she took her hopes out of the equation and subtracted her dreams one by one and dropped deeply into the comfort of an absolute zero. |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Everything about this piece was brilliantly calculated--from the title, "Mathematically Sleeping" to "right into the comfort of an absolute zero" !!! EA [This message has been edited by Earth Angel (12-05-2002 01:21 PM).] |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
jellybeans Mathmatically speaking, you are 100% a poet! |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
JB...this is brilliant! Bravo! I so love this. It makes me smile in spite of the depth of feelings. You wrote this exceedingly well. Enjoyed every line. Hugs and warm regards, Pat  ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
I was writing out the equation in my head as reading this. Would make a cool book cover. (I think the snow's getting to me already...lol) |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
jellybeans LOL although this is no laughing matter. Well done, enjoyed the read. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I loved this!!! *S* Not the pain that led to its production... but the beautifully crafted poetic perfection! *G* As someone who once majored in math, I couldn't resist the equations. *G* Now if only I didn't identify so much with: She took her unhappiness and multiplied it by WhatCouldHaveBeen, but found the resulting figure too large to handle, so she divided it by WishesNeverComeTrueAnyway... but everyone knows what happens when you divide by a negative |
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garysgirl 
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Lady, a brilliant mind shows through in this poem. I always liked algebra, and I like this poem, too.  "Love makes the world go around" |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
absolute zero... a term used to describe the point where no temp exists. To subtract to the point this is where you are, tells me you have taken too much out of your life, for a write such as this does not come from the absence of warmth... but the missing of warmth. beautfully done as always my friend. |
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Walter Poe Senior Member
since 1999-10-13
Posts 787 |
Maybe its a point of view few share but zero is a good place you can always start there Personally i have problems counting over 3 but college quantum physics come easily to me You can never reach zero no matter how hard you try cause after all the warmth you show proves you could still fall. Take a good look at my face |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
EA, thank you, how funny that what keeps me awake makes you smile Martie, glad you enjoyed Pat, yep, I have been accused of having a wry wit, and I guess it comes out in this one…thank you much Duncan, we just got rid of our clouds and snow and have blue skies today, so I am smiling, thank you for your comments Seymour, thank you, and yep the sadness in this is outweighed by the smiles, and glad it reads that way suthern, I know lady, I know…and lol, I loved math in college, could actually do Algebra to get RID of a headache, lol, but I had to scramble to remember all the mathematical terms I needed for this to come out right, glad you liked lady GG, thank you, and me too, always loved algebra cpat…you read more into me than I think that I am showing *smile* …thank you for the read and the compassion walter, thank you for your comments, that my warmth shows despite my efforts to hide it is a compliment thank you all....I am pleased that my insomnia made you smile |
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Elimeno P Junior Member
since 2002-12-06
Posts 17The only place I want to be! |
I was never very good at math...a habitual C student. I still count on my fingers sometimes. This is very interesting how you use the "math terms" with a wickedly good subject. Very interesting! EP |
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Sandpiper Senior Member
since 2002-06-15
Posts 738land of flora and fauna |
Excellent!! "And it was at that age...Poetry arrived in search of me...And something started in my soul." |
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Ice_Queen Junior Member
since 2002-12-04
Posts 29Delaware, USA |
I loved this. One small beef, though. The wording of this verse: There were still too many variables to define so she took her hopes out of the equation and subtracted her dreams one by one and dropped deeply into the comfort of an absolute zero. is great, but I think your breaks are little off. Maybe try it like this: There were still too many variables to define so she took her hopes out of the equation and subtracted her dreams one by one and dropped deeply into the comfort of an absolute zero. [This message has been edited by Ice_Queen (12-08-2002 06:56 PM).] |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
lmnop.......thank you sandpiper, thank you ice...my line breaks usually take little effort, they usually just feel right or if not right are quickly adjusted....but this one skipped by me, I do like your version better, thank you for the time and comments |
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