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whiskey
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0 posted 2002-12-04 12:00 PM



The breeze blew across my skin
I felt it tickle my legs
It was hot that day
The sun shone intense
I looked up from my book
Across the grass amongst the trees
A green field gently swaying
I heard a bird flutter its wings
Jumped, turned to see
Nothing only blue sky
I lay back on my blanket
Began to read once again
A flash of colour
Out the corner of my eye I saw
Darting red from tree to tree
Is something there I scream
No answer returns with the wind
Seconds later I hear it
Your voice saying
Wake up my sleepy girl
I am flying above trees, field
In an instance I awake
Opening my eyes
I see your face toward mine
Lips kissing my head
Good morning baby
I hear you say
It was all a dream my mind tells me
The breeze blew across my skin
It was hot that day

[This message has been edited by whiskey (12-04-2002 12:11 AM).]

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Dark Angel
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1 posted 2002-12-04 01:06 AM


I love the tickle of breeze over my skin... this was very nice.

Maree

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2 posted 2002-12-04 01:10 AM


Julie, it sounded like a   REALLY  nice dream......

"Love makes the world go around"
~~with love and hugs from Ethel~~
                  

PoeticJustice
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3 posted 2002-12-04 02:48 AM


Could the end "it was very hot that day" mean that the dream was going to come true? I think so
JamesMichael
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4 posted 2002-12-04 03:59 AM


Enjoyed reading this...James
inkedgoddess
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5 posted 2002-12-04 06:43 AM




the breeze flies by with a tap on your heart, i know this feeling, like the inter-
connectedness between 2 people i love,
touching through the spiritual world,
well something like this, but i liked this very much,

Sandpiper
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6 posted 2002-12-04 06:56 AM


Hmmmmm..I just love when a dream visits on warm breeze--lovely!
regards2you
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7 posted 2002-12-04 09:21 AM




You sitting there, I could see:


"a green field gently swaying"

I like this a lot.

Warm Regards, Pat


..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons..
        "Desiderata"

Salty
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8 posted 2002-12-04 10:11 AM


IT was hot that day probably had alot to do with what you were dreaming...right? *S*

WEll I enjoyed the breeze myself
~Salty

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