Open Poetry #23 |
Instinctively |
Sandpiper Senior Member
since 2002-06-15
Posts 738land of flora and fauna |
I mourn the waste of that empty time, when paper wings kissed the edge of a jagged sky and tore into a freefall I grasped air with paper-shred fingers and a promise to never again fly in a sky of need or feel or want yet even birds seek a warmer place instinctively and too, these senses; sleeping bare beneath white-whipped sky, waiting for a north wind and the sound of wings sweeping from patterned flight to pluck awake forward time in a warmer place-- grasping real, and a promise to hold and be held in that place where we were meant to be instinctively |
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quietlydying
since 2001-06-10
Posts 935the wonderful land of oz |
there was some very beautiful language used in this. it flowed so well and was a very enjoyable read. nicely done. /jen/ i'm freezing, i'm starving, i'm bleeding to death. everything's fine. [tracy bonham] |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(big hugggsssssss) I too am so discouraged by that truth, and wish we can follow our instincts as we please while also being reasonable, and that is just the problem, what is defined as reasonable? (sigh) This is very touching, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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whiskey
since 1999-12-28
Posts 1278Australia |
Beautiful flow, I really enjoyed this alot thanks for sharing |
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WinterWren Senior Member
since 2002-12-01
Posts 1044...Coming to |
That was a wonderfull beautiful and expressive poem. I loved it so much! Laugh often, love much, live well. WinterWren |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Sandpiper, I love the way you expressed yourself in this poem. You did it very well. Thank you for sharing. "Love makes the world go around" |
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Robert Adamson Member
since 2002-10-21
Posts 328PA/USA |
This poem reminded me of 9-11. This was very nicely written. Thank you. etoodog [This message has been edited by Robert Adamson (12-04-2002 01:47 AM).] |
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