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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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There. I just did it again. An elevator in descend-- the only thing surprising me-- familiar as the hug of friend-- a small head rush and buckled knees from direction's change abrupt. Damn I just screwed up again. I press the buttons frantically praying for an opening-- and any floor will do. I need to feel the stomp of stairs. I have to find the ground again-- walls keep beat too anxiously. You are here. <--- Where is the sky? Now I even fight the flight, I mock my own futility. Spare me the fluorescent lights. Trying not to kick the glass of this revolving door... I greet the open air again meet the eyes of puzzled stare strangers know I laugh to think and wish I were inside again. |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
..."I need to feel the stomp of stairs"---for me, this lines says it all! I loved this! Linda [This message has been edited by Earth Angel (12-03-2002 12:03 PM).] |
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garysgirl  
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
As always, Karen, I liked this. Your poems always have me reading real fast, so I can get to the end to see what's going to happen.  "Love makes the world go around" |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Linda--yep, there is only thing better than a stomp of stairs when you're in the middle of a fight-or-flight full blown anxiety attack, and that is the stomp of stairs--barefoot Thanks for understanding.  ethel--sweet lady, you. Thanks for your generosity. So gracious, thanks for reading. and yep, folks..  just a small anxiety attack! Everything's under control now. Go back to your quills.  Hugs all.  |
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RSWells Member Elite
since 2001-06-17
Posts 2533 |
A blast of reality's air, though from the title I'd half hoped this had lost it's way from the adult forum.....he he he, naughty me. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Hmmm....now THERE'S a thought! *chuckle* Thanks you. |
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zenny Member
since 2002-11-24
Posts 371Belgium |
very beautiful poem serenity I just flew over the words to know the end of it |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
zenny from Belgium--I love meeting new people, thanks for popping in! I DO have some catching up to do... Thanks you, and welcome to passions and shame on me for not doing that sooner. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
serenity, Reads like you took a trip through the revolving doors, enjoyed |
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Salty Senior Member
since 2002-11-23
Posts 669Texas |
Now this is a very unique description of the anxiety attack. I'd say you hit the target with these words. oooohweeeeee...I'm glad you out of there! there's comfort in knowing others have experienced the same feelings ...and made it through *S* Very good job you did ~Salty In the Midst of movement and chaos, keep stillness inside of you. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
sy? I'm the kind of person who actually gets stuck in those things...grin.. but you KNEW that, didnja? and oh boy I get to hug seymour again! came back to say hi to salty--very nice to meet you. (Your name begs for a shot of tequila tho!) Where HAVE I been? (Don't anyone answer that, she doesn't really wanna know.) I'm off to read. Thanks for popping in! [This message has been edited by serenity blaze (12-03-2002 12:43 PM).] |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
just goes to show, one shouldn't push buttons when they don't know what the button is connected to or what it is going to do... |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I've missed you, you smart ass you. |
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brian sites Senior Member
since 2002-06-25
Posts 1475usa |
you are here |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Yes. I AM. mmmmmmmm.... (pssst?  )OH. "WHAT???" MMMMmmmm. |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
Boy...the title of this had me all sweaty!! |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
Trick is to pretend you're filming a video for the Aerosmith song of the same name....  |
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Sandpiper Senior Member
since 2002-06-15
Posts 738land of flora and fauna |
Whew! I may never ride an elevator again!! Deeeeeeeeeep breath! |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
serenity For me its crowds that make me crazy to be alone. You caught the panic with this one, I can relate.  |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
serenity blaze - eeeeek...for those of us who experience daily anxiety attacks, you have described the feeling very well. Not being able to find the EXIT sign in a busy, brightly lit department store, is one that pushes my panic button!  shakey hugs, Chris "Hope" is the thing with feathers- |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (sigh) As long as the big door is shut closed, no stranger can ever persuade you, so go down where no shadow can see the light to camouflage! (sigh) This is excellent, sweet friend, I just love your thoughts, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Karen, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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WinterWren Senior Member
since 2002-12-01
Posts 1044...Coming to |
You made it easier for me and Im sure for other people to understand a little better what that is like. And it was a nice poem too, lol! WinterWren |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Thanks all...I was just trying to capture the "trapped" feeling of anxiety, and the elevator was actually my rather overused metaphor for the accompanying moodiness. I'm happy that it was understood, but dismayed at how many of you could relate. Anxiety sucks.  Hugs to you all. |
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