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Robert Adamson
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since 2002-10-21

Posts 328
PA/USA

0 posted 2002-12-02 08:56 PM

Sun-dipped leaves, shifting gray-thin branches
My god damaged heart, cracked a twig
In my pocket, kicked out: as I walked
On a corn field at the end of a pumpkin patch.

Stems and ditches bleed
Empty shotgun shells stuffed
With wooden crumbs.

Leaves are scattered by the gun
And a unpainted shack;
The sweetest Nose,
Barks at the smoke and a shadow

etoodog

RSWells
Member Elite

since 2001-06-17

Posts 2533

1 posted 2002-12-03 12:17 PM

Geez....I felt as though I was on a nature walk and discovered a body....powerful.

CSKpoet
Senior Member

since 2002-07-12

Posts 845
Island in Paradise

2 posted 2002-12-03 12:37 PM

Beautiful walk in the country, RobertQ
You image it so excellently.
I love nature in poetry..
thanks, Cher

Poetry is:
Passion, imagination and intellect running together.

Aloha with warmest regards, Cheryl Stewart Koomoa

Mysteria

Member Laureate

since 2001-03-07

Posts 18328
British Columbia, Canada

3 posted 2002-12-03 12:47 PM

Now that is what I call a colorful, powerful piece of writing. Excellent!

Let there be peace on earth,
and let it begin with me.

Martie

Moderator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

4 posted 2002-12-03 01:17 AM

Robert

Something about this was so sweet, yet it hurt. Enjoyed!

Sandpiper
Senior Member

since 2002-06-15

Posts 738
land of flora and fauna

5 posted 2002-12-03 05:21 AM

Ohhhh, there are walks--this was a trip!!--enjoyed!

doreen peri
Member Elite

since 1999-05-25

Posts 3812
Virginia

6 posted 2002-12-03 03:14 PM

excellent use of imagery
in poetry with substance

well done!

VAS
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

7 posted 2002-12-04 12:32 PM

That last line is eerie...well, I guess, really, it's the last word. The elements are vivid, but I can't really determine fully what they are, in composite.

Whether on the shoal or on the shore,
I'll seek the lighthouse evermore.

Robert Adamson
Member

since 2002-10-21

Posts 328
PA/USA

8 posted 2002-12-04 12:47 PM

~VAS It's just a dog in the distance. I do need to buff this up a bit. I rushed to it. Robert Adamson, Thanks

etoodog

garysgirl

Member Laureate

since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

9 posted 2002-12-04 01:47 AM

Now, Robert, I was going to be smart and tell everybody that
you were with a hunting dog.......then, you gave your
explanation in your response to Virginia.

I really liked the picture you painted with your words, Robert.

"Love makes the world go around"
~~with love and hugs from Ethel~~

quik
Member

since 2002-11-27

Posts 91
Dinwiddie,Virginia

10 posted 2002-12-04 01:51 PM

i LOVE IT!!!

ecrivan
Member Elite

since 2001-12-10

Posts 3923
my own state

11 posted 2002-12-04 11:19 PM

figure somebody likes to hunt and find repose
in his country refuge...nice and quaint

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