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Open Poetry #23

Æternum Vale (Edit)

Aenimal
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-18

Posts 7350
the ass-end of space

0 posted 2002-12-02 02:16 PM

Caught in the headlights
of another listless day
trapped in a concrete cage
steel beams that block the sky

I've never shared in optimism
tomorrow never keeps
its promise of a new day
The same old things regurgate

And I've found it all
a little hard to stomach

Even in a weakened state
from tired bones within
hope binds in threadbare strings
to people and places

The sweetness of these memories
and of what life could be
washes out the aftertaste
of the bitterness of all that is

Its only hope that keeps us from
walking out on life

Note: I never much cared for how this poem worked so I've made some minor edits to make it tighter. It's still a message of hope even in the darkest of times.

raph

[This message has been edited by Aenimal (12-03-2002 08:29 PM).]

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

1 posted 2002-12-02 05:56 PM

Thanks for the line of hope you offered up at the end of this...I cannot seem to think that some good is found somewhere, no matter how dark any day gets.

MARK V SHELDON
Member Elite

since 2001-06-21

Posts 3015
In a corporeal internship...

2 posted 2002-12-02 10:16 PM

Great imagery, Rapahel -- especially in the first and last stanzas. This brings to mind a favorite quote from a friend: "Fight the inertia." I'm enjoying your writing.

-MVS

"AS ABOVE SO BELOW"

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

3 posted 2002-12-02 10:21 PM

Yes..there should always be hope.
Very good write here...enjoyed.
~Hugs~

~ Life is too short not to believe in Santa Claus ~

Aenimal
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-18

Posts 7350
the ass-end of space

4 posted 2002-12-02 10:42 PM

Sunshine I'm grateful for you and the moderators for allowing this to go through and in the future I will confer with you first.

Thank you Mark I appreciate your support

Thank you very much Enchantress hope is the glue that binds us together.

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