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Sweetpoet16m4u04
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0 posted 2002-12-02 03:46 PM



Wishes

I wish I could be the one
You think of day and night
I wish I could be the one
You wish you could hold tight

I wish I could be the one
You want in every way
I wish I could be that one
You love more and more each day

I wish I could be the one
To look into those sparkling eyes
I wish I could be the one
That gets your every surprise

I wish I could show you
That you mean everything to me
And I wish you could be the one
To love me for me.

I wish I could be the one,
to have the strength to tell.
I wish I could be the one,
to have you wishing for me as well.

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angelswing
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1 posted 2002-12-02 03:58 PM


'I wish I could hear you wish,
Each and everyday,
This poem that I'm reading,
Is whisking me away .'

He he he, lovely poem ...
I enjoyed it a lot; good rhyme, nice flow and lovely romantic style .
L.of.L. Tom .
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Seymour Tabin
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2 posted 2002-12-02 04:06 PM


Sweetpoet16m4u04
Nicely done, enjoyed the read.

Sweetpoet16m4u04
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3 posted 2002-12-02 05:45 PM


Thanks for all the wonderful comments so far.

JamesMichael
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4 posted 2002-12-04 03:09 AM


Enjoyed...and I hope you get your wish...James
cherrylips
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5 posted 2002-12-04 07:50 AM


'I wish I could be the one
who wrote as well as you'
Excuse my poor attempt at a compliment. I just want ot say that I think your poem is lovely and I have to admit it spoke to my heart.  I enjoyed this a lot, dx

whiskey
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6 posted 2002-12-04 10:03 AM


If you wish long enough hopefully your wish will come true. Very sweet and romantic nicely done
Seymour Tabin
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7 posted 2002-12-04 10:08 AM


Sweetpoet16m4u04,
Nice read, enjoyed.

kissa~rachelle
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8 posted 2004-01-20 10:57 PM


I wish...for all your wishes to come true!

Loved it. Beautifully written, and wonderful wishes!

I wish that moer guys,
loved like you.
I wish that they loved,
so sweet and so true!

hehe. I like it, I like it olot! lol
xoxoxo
kissa

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