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Martie
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0 posted 2002-12-01 01:08 PM



Tell me Not to Say Come Down

Do you remember Sunday mornings on the hill
and the strawberry sky waking summer

we sat in the crook of the tree
and listened
to the brook not a river
no
but to the ear

I am filling the places of the past
with light
from the open fire
where you cooked bacon on Sunday mornings
and our fragrance was part of the canyon then
with the hoop of our children climbing the rock walls

you would tell me not to say come down

there were some things you understood
from your own place that weeped

so many years you held them in
before you slung them back
and they hit me

I was just there for the slop over

Remember the apple turnovers

fragile even now was that one day darned
so I could pinch it open and take a bite of you
still warm

just before the change of season
it is right that I do so

[This message has been edited by Martie (12-01-2002 01:12 PM).]

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1 posted 2002-12-01 01:12 PM



This was slow mo through filtered light...
I could even hear
the strawberry bloom...

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2 posted 2002-12-01 01:16 PM


Martie
You have an appetite for apple pie, excellent.

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3 posted 2002-12-01 01:42 PM




(smiles) Oh Martie, your gorgeous words always have that beauty in making us feel right at home, this is such a comely piece filled with such light! (kiss on cheek) Yay, apples, yay, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Martie, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

Martie
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4 posted 2002-12-01 01:55 PM


Karilea--memories are sometimes like that.

Sy--Was thinking of the sweet parts of my life with the x husband..apple turnovers were one of them...thanks.

Noah--I'm glad you saw the sweet in this and not the edge of bitter.

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5 posted 2002-12-01 02:31 PM



Martie, Thanks for the explanation. How sad, some can simply never, or rarely,  break down...and weep...and when they do, just as suddenly, they close back up to a coldness, hard as rock.

Part of it, I think, is the fear if they cry, they will never be able to stop. Difficult to live with a person, shut down like that.  

I like this a lot. I could smell the bacon...you take us right with you when you write....I was there.

Hugs and love, Pat



    

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6 posted 2002-12-01 02:32 PM


I saw both sweet and bitter, Martie, though the sweet is what I truly tasted while reading this.   *hugs*

The stars will shine when I am gone,
the earth will turn on as before,
the gulls, still race along the shore,
the morning star, still kiss the dawn

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7 posted 2002-12-01 03:20 PM


Martie, I read it over twice before I read the replies.
I could tell the first time that there were writings
"between the lines". I just didn't know who it was about
until I read your explanation. I really relate to it, now,
because even though my deceased husband and I had a  VERY  rocky
twenty something years of marriage, there are still some good
memories. I just haven't figured out, yet, if there were more
good or bad ones. I do have lots of hurtful scars from those
years, though. It seems that they want to pop back up sometimes.
Do you feel that way, too? It sounds, though, like you're
doing the way I do....you're trying to push the bad memories
away and think of the good.
Anyway, thank you, sweet friend, for sharing your heart with us.
You are such a talent and are so good at writing of your emotions.
          

"Love makes the world go around"
~~with love and hugs from Ethel~~
                  

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8 posted 2002-12-01 04:01 PM


The sweet taste of an apple turnover...
at the same time a tear slides down the cheek.
Wonderful write dear Martie!
~Warm hugs~

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9 posted 2002-12-01 06:03 PM


You weave strands of bitter with strands of sweet--a tapestry where memories meet--lovely.
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10 posted 2002-12-01 06:34 PM


Like you, I have reflective moments where warm thoughts of my wasband and our beautiful little family filter through my mind--like misty, watercolor memories....

Beautifully expressed, Marti.

~ sending loving thoughts your way

Linda

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11 posted 2002-12-01 06:36 PM


enjoyed
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12 posted 2002-12-01 07:33 PM


MartieSis~

'there were some things you understood
from your own place that weeped'


Lady ... you are so softly turned~
How sweet the good memories~
Keep them warm-with-remember dearest one~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

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13 posted 2002-12-01 07:50 PM


Pat--actually my reply to your poem started this poem in my mind.  Hugs for that and you.

Michael--Then the poem fullfilled its purpose...thank you and hugs back.

Ethel--It does no good to hold on to the bad memories...they can eat away at you and make you a bitter person.  That's why I choose to remember the good.  Thank you for spending so much time with this poem.

Nancy--That's the way life is, huh? Warm hugs back at ya!

Sandpiper--Thank you for your verse of true, and you.

Linda--Yes, that's just the way it is..thanks for understanding.

Vandana--I'm glad!

Marge--leave it to you to find one of the most important parts..thanks, sweet sis!


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14 posted 2002-12-01 08:21 PM


It's good to remember the bitter and the sweet moments for it is both that make us who we are today. Very well expressed, Martie!
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15 posted 2002-12-01 09:28 PM


Martie - Life & Love is a complicated mixture of the sweet and the bitter.....none of which we would want to have missed when all is said and done. hugs, Chris

"Hope" is the thing with feathers-
that perches in the soul....
                  
                       -Emily Dickinson

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16 posted 2002-12-01 10:20 PM


I am filling the places of the past
with light
from the open fire
where you cooked bacon on Sunday mornings
and our fragrance was part of the canyon then
with the hoop of our children climbing the rock walls

you would tell me not to say come down

there were some things you understood
from your own place that weeped


so many years you held them in
before you slung them back
and they hit me
==================================


I am filling the places of the past
with light


yes.. you are...and the warm is healing and the forgiveness sets us free...few know the how and when to let go........


there were some things you understood
from your own place that weeped


yes... you know  

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17 posted 2002-12-02 04:25 PM


Martie - how well you weave many emotions and feelings and thoughts in this wonderful memory poem - some of the powerful ambiguity of life - bitter and sweet - loved it - Paul
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18 posted 2002-12-02 04:38 PM


There is always some sweet with the tart, and of this I also can attest.  Well done poetess.

                
Let there be peace on earth,
and let it begin with me.

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19 posted 2002-12-02 05:41 PM


quote:
fragile even now was that one day darned
so I could pinch it open and take a bite of you
still warm


yes!!!
martie, you consistently amaze me
you are a very fine Poet

wonderful work

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20 posted 2002-12-02 06:05 PM


I am filling the places of the past
with light
from the open fire


What strength I get from these words of hope, Martie. Wonderful write!

Corinne

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21 posted 2002-12-02 07:06 PM


fragile even now was that one day darned
so I could pinch it open and take a bite of you
still warm

just before the change of season
it is right that I do so
timing is everything....

beautiful as always

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