Open Poetry #23 |
Tell me Not to Say Come Down |
Martie
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Tell me Not to Say Come Down Do you remember Sunday mornings on the hill and the strawberry sky waking summer we sat in the crook of the tree and listened to the brook not a river no but to the ear I am filling the places of the past with light from the open fire where you cooked bacon on Sunday mornings and our fragrance was part of the canyon then with the hoop of our children climbing the rock walls you would tell me not to say come down there were some things you understood from your own place that weeped so many years you held them in before you slung them back and they hit me I was just there for the slop over Remember the apple turnovers fragile even now was that one day darned so I could pinch it open and take a bite of you still warm just before the change of season it is right that I do so [This message has been edited by Martie (12-01-2002 01:12 PM).] |
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Sunshine
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Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
This was slow mo through filtered light... I could even hear the strawberry bloom... |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Martie You have an appetite for apple pie, excellent. |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(smiles) Oh Martie, your gorgeous words always have that beauty in making us feel right at home, this is such a comely piece filled with such light! (kiss on cheek) Yay, apples, yay, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Martie, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Martie
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Karilea--memories are sometimes like that. Sy--Was thinking of the sweet parts of my life with the x husband..apple turnovers were one of them...thanks. Noah--I'm glad you saw the sweet in this and not the edge of bitter. |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Martie, Thanks for the explanation. How sad, some can simply never, or rarely, break down...and weep...and when they do, just as suddenly, they close back up to a coldness, hard as rock. Part of it, I think, is the fear if they cry, they will never be able to stop. Difficult to live with a person, shut down like that. I like this a lot. I could smell the bacon...you take us right with you when you write....I was there. Hugs and love, Pat ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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Auguste
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
I saw both sweet and bitter, Martie, though the sweet is what I truly tasted while reading this. *hugs* The stars will shine when I am gone, |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Martie, I read it over twice before I read the replies. I could tell the first time that there were writings "between the lines". I just didn't know who it was about until I read your explanation. I really relate to it, now, because even though my deceased husband and I had a VERY rocky twenty something years of marriage, there are still some good memories. I just haven't figured out, yet, if there were more good or bad ones. I do have lots of hurtful scars from those years, though. It seems that they want to pop back up sometimes. Do you feel that way, too? It sounds, though, like you're doing the way I do....you're trying to push the bad memories away and think of the good. Anyway, thank you, sweet friend, for sharing your heart with us. You are such a talent and are so good at writing of your emotions. "Love makes the world go around" |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
The sweet taste of an apple turnover... at the same time a tear slides down the cheek. Wonderful write dear Martie! ~Warm hugs~ |
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Sandpiper Senior Member
since 2002-06-15
Posts 738land of flora and fauna |
You weave strands of bitter with strands of sweet--a tapestry where memories meet--lovely. |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Like you, I have reflective moments where warm thoughts of my wasband and our beautiful little family filter through my mind--like misty, watercolor memories.... Beautifully expressed, Marti. ~ sending loving thoughts your way Linda |
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vandana
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Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
MartieSis~ 'there were some things you understood from your own place that weeped' Lady ... you are so softly turned~ How sweet the good memories~ Keep them warm-with-remember dearest one~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Martie
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Pat--actually my reply to your poem started this poem in my mind. Hugs for that and you. Michael--Then the poem fullfilled its purpose...thank you and hugs back. Ethel--It does no good to hold on to the bad memories...they can eat away at you and make you a bitter person. That's why I choose to remember the good. Thank you for spending so much time with this poem. Nancy--That's the way life is, huh? Warm hugs back at ya! Sandpiper--Thank you for your verse of true, and you. Linda--Yes, that's just the way it is..thanks for understanding. Vandana--I'm glad! Marge--leave it to you to find one of the most important parts..thanks, sweet sis! |
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Denise
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It's good to remember the bitter and the sweet moments for it is both that make us who we are today. Very well expressed, Martie! |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Martie - Life & Love is a complicated mixture of the sweet and the bitter.....none of which we would want to have missed when all is said and done. hugs, Chris "Hope" is the thing with feathers- |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
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I am filling the places of the past with light from the open fire where you cooked bacon on Sunday mornings and our fragrance was part of the canyon then with the hoop of our children climbing the rock walls you would tell me not to say come down there were some things you understood from your own place that weeped so many years you held them in before you slung them back and they hit me ================================== I am filling the places of the past with light yes.. you are...and the warm is healing and the forgiveness sets us free...few know the how and when to let go........ there were some things you understood from your own place that weeped yes... you know |
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Goodknight Member Elite
since 2002-06-15
Posts 2386Ohio, USA |
Martie - how well you weave many emotions and feelings and thoughts in this wonderful memory poem - some of the powerful ambiguity of life - bitter and sweet - loved it - Paul |
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Mysteria
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Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
There is always some sweet with the tart, and of this I also can attest. Well done poetess. |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
quote: yes!!! martie, you consistently amaze me you are a very fine Poet wonderful work |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
I am filling the places of the past with light from the open fire What strength I get from these words of hope, Martie. Wonderful write! Corinne |
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Cpat Hair
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fragile even now was that one day darned so I could pinch it open and take a bite of you still warm just before the change of season it is right that I do so timing is everything.... beautiful as always |
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