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Ethan Halo Senior Member
since 2000-04-28
Posts 793on the roof again 
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*i've just been feelin lost lately, wondering if i should go back, or how i'm supposed to move on...i don't know if i got this right, but here it is...* memento i've been a little lost lately. Smoke and mirrors, coke and beers, a little choked, loaded with fears and i'm unsure of where i'm going and where i've been... who's worth knowing and who's a friend? Nothing's slowing, but it's slow-going like a freeway in the rain. Close my eyes and open them, the world is still so dark. Maybe it wouldn't feel so dark if i just had a little spark. Give me a hint, tell me where i've been tell me how this story ends give me anything to get me going again... Give me a memento so i can stop forgetting. Post-it notes and Polaroids Should i be smiling or regretting? i thought i knew what i was doing. Good intentions; pay no attention to that litle voice, just bench him. Gonna get out on the road tonight. i don't wanna remember if it could've been better just drive lost in my mind, not losing my mind. level of living stuck on survive. i'm so uncertain Give me a clue, help me with what i'm s'posed to do. Give me indemnity from these memories, forget about these enmities and find a reverie i can climb back into. there were some good times... weren't there? Give me a memento so i can stop forgetting. Post-it notes and Polaroids Should i be smiling or regretting? a little unglued and still confused... who is who and who's getting used? am i losing you or just using you? which parts of this rouse are true? All i have are questions... What choice do i have? What truth do i choose... i got swept away trying to find my way are the answers waiting for me or in the thoughts i've kept away? i don't remember you i'm not sure if i want to... i'm moving on i just don't know where are you with me? it's our struggle for identity that leaves us all unknown [This message has been edited by Ethan Halo (12-01-2002 01:04 PM).] |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Ethan, You got it right. It is perfect! nice phrase, says so much: "Post-it notes and Polaroids" I like this a great deal... touches something within myself, not so much lost as just plain soul-searching. Taking stock. Warm regards, Pat ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. "Desiderata" [This message has been edited by regards2you (12-01-2002 08:10 AM).] |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
This has such a turn turn turn quality to it that the lost feeling is palpable... several good lines in here, Ethan... all I can say is, it's about time you got yourself back in here... we've missed you! |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
ETHAN! This is quite good. YOu kept me changing gears, forward then reverse, and hoping somehow you find the green light to go ahead. Well done, Ethan poet.  ******************************************* Good intentions; pay no attention to that litle voice, just bench him. Gonna get out on the road tonight. i don't wanna remember if it could've been better just drive lost in my mind, not losing my mind. level of living stuck on survive ************************************ [This message has been edited by Midnitesun (12-01-2002 08:25 AM).] |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Ethan, Good write, enjoyed. The answer is within yourself, but I guess you knew that and a good guide would be the golden rule. "do unto others as you would unto yourself." |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
You reeled me into your mind and thoughts and it was quite a ride! A rather unsettling experience but very interesting. Most of us, at one time or another can identify with this state of quandary. You conveyed it extremely well! ~ sending you a song and a prayer---and lots of angel hugs Earth Angel |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ethen, it's so good to see you! "lost in my mind, not losing my mind. level of living stuck on survive." For me the above stanza said it all...lost in your mind is good, as is questioning purpose and reason, it's what moves us forward. I wish you the best! |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
i've been a little lost lately. Smoke and mirrors, coke and beers, a little choked, loaded with fears and i'm unsure of where i'm going and where i've been... who's worth knowing and who's a friend? Nothing's slowing, but it's slow-going like a freeway in the rain. Close my eyes and open them, the world is still so dark. Maybe it wouldn't feel so dark if i just had a little spark. Give me a hint, tell me where i've been tell me how this story ends give me anything to get me going again... Give me a memento so i can stop forgetting. Post-it notes and Polaroids Should i be smiling or regretting? ===================================== I love the melodics and lyrical quality of your rhymes...(my pip ROB)  Im thinking that even when youre lost...your always one step ahead of the rest...you just seem to know the way back.... and I know that you already know...eventually...we learn that we will in time be able to "smile at the regrets"...thats how we move forward on this path of lifes lessons learned the hard way... makes for soul poetry...and thats always what I find next to your name. Yeah....welcome back groovy guy  http://www.matchboxtwenty.com/lyrics.html check out the lyrics to "unwell" |
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Ethan Halo Senior Member
since 2000-04-28
Posts 793on the roof again |
thanks all for your kind words and welcomes. they're much appreciated. JM: you know me too well... now i may not wait til payday to buy the record....thanks  [This message has been edited by Ethan Halo (12-01-2002 02:40 PM).] |
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