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ptwils165 Member
since 2002-11-29
Posts 50 |
A face on a train reminds me of her, standing at shore, flicking strands of wet hair. Staring through sunlight as if life were a window to all she’d amazed at, when the world was laid bare. The moon rising gently, over ruins or trees whistles me back to those soft summer days; catching the wind shifting sands down the ocean, arrested by innocence in warm August’s rays. A face in the mirror tells me she’s gone, that loneliness grows now this image is torn. Yet sat in the silence with a photo in hand, I’m right here beside her, through this darkening dawn. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Welcome to Passions, where no one is ever really alone... Please! Check your E-mail for a Special Greeting! Karilea |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA |
Welcome! very much enjoyed your first post. loved the lines : "whistles me back to those soft summer days;" and... "I’m right here beside her, through this darkening dawn." once again, welcome, hope you enjoy every moment youre here! lots of love, gemma xxxxxxxxx learning each day, for you and i, our paths have met, i've already learnt that you are love. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
A sad write, but well written. WELCOME!! Hope you enjoy these blue pages.  |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Welcome! I love this, your first post! It's a little beauty! Some fantastic lines and you nearly moved me to tears with some of them. Very touching. I look forward to reading more of your poetry! Earth Angel |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
  (big hugggsssssss) This is such a sad but heartfelt debut, sweet friend, my heart goes out to you and I wish for loves train siren to again come to you and fill your deserving heart with true happiness, I love it! Welcome to Passions, sweet friend, may you be inspired by all of us here as we will all be inspired by your lovely words! I can't wait to read more of your lovely words, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing!   May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
Salutations! You've managed to achieve one of the highest honors in my book: "The Goosebump Factor" with this poem. There is great comfort in relating... Enjoy your stay. -MVS "AS ABOVE SO BELOW" |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
WELCOME TO PASSIONS! Very much enjoyed your first post! I'm looking forward to seeing more of your work. ~Hugs & Smiles, Nancy~ ~ Life is too short not to believe in Santa Claus ~ |
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ptwils165 Member
since 2002-11-29
Posts 50 |
Wow! What can I say guys?!!! -except thank you all so very much for the most incredible welcome I think I've ever known. I'm so glad that some of you enjoyed the poem - you'll have gathered I'm brand new here, as I am to writing poetry in general so thanks for the encouragement. Hope some of the comments weren't just to cheer me up either! thanks again, take care, Pete. |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Welcome to the family! I enjoyed your poem and look forward to reading more from you. Take some time and find all the nooks and crannies of our home. We've got a workshop, some discussion forums and plenty of ways and forms to read poetry!  |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
ptwils165 Well done, enjoyed the read. |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Welcome...enjoyed your first post...look forward to sharing more. ThisDiamond |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Pete - Welcome to Passions!! I really enjoyed your poem. Have fun here. Chris  "Hope" is the thing with feathers- |
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Miah Senior Member
since 2002-08-26
Posts 1062Pennsylvania |
Very sad. Great write! Welcome to passions!  |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Noticed a poem in open 26 and was so taken with it, decided to look at your first poems, posted. This is wonderful as the other. Deeply touching, you remind me of another poet I've read.... Enjoyed, Pat ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA |
Yes, still loving this. |
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