Open Poetry #23 |
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The Show |
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Jason Member
since 2002-07-31
Posts 72Macon, GA |
As I sat there and watched I saw the Show slowly unfold then I listened as well to hear the words left untold and the lies within the lives of those poor wretched souls who've been imprisoned since youth within the life they'd been sold and they can't escape now because they think they're too old So they sit back and watch to see the Show slowly unfold then they listen as well to hear the words left untold and the lies within the lives of the poor youthful souls who want something for nothing and are, themselves, the ones sold only to learn their mistake as they too slowly grow old Now you sit here and watch you'll see the Show slowly unfold if you'll listen, as well you'll hear the words left untol and the lies within the lives of the misguided souls who've come here to bargain for more power and gold though it is never enough to replace what they've sold because, in spite of it all they can't stop growing old. Jason Daniels 2002 This is the latest version of an old poem. It is a re-write of one of my originals. It doesn't fit the season, but it fits my life now. P.S. Happy Thanksgiving to All. Practiced in the Art of Perception... |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
the repetition makes it hit home... old or not, it's written well. *s M you have a nice day, also. |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
youve taken this slice of life and written of it well...... |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Jason Interesting write, enjoyed. |
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whiskey![]()
since 1999-12-28
Posts 1278Australia |
Very intreging I enjoyed reading it very much ![]() |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
I enjoyed the flow of this; it is well written and a thinking piece. Have a good day... Warm regards, Pat ![]() ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Hope the season gets to you before the day is out, feeling trapped and too old to change circumstances is too sad, anytime, but especially today. Whether on the shoal or on the shore, |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
![]() Well... I happen to know how old you are... and that there's still time to turn those lies to truths... and through poetry like this you've taken some veritable steps, m'friend... ![]() [This message has been edited by Nan (12-02-2002 08:44 AM).] |
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Jason Member
since 2002-07-31
Posts 72Macon, GA |
Thank You All, What a wonderful feeling I got when I came here and saw all these encouraging words from all you beautiful people. I wish I could spend more time here among you fine folk. Jason Daniels P.S. Nan, this isn't about me, it's an observation of the world around me. Drop me a line some time, I'll tell you all about it. J.D. Practiced in the Art of Perception... |
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