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The Lonely Stranger
Member

since 1999-06-18

Posts 361
Upstate, NY, USA

0 posted 2002-11-27 10:05 PM

On moonlit hill I contemplate,
The whimsy of the lady, Fate

In her wind, I twist, I flail
I flutter like an unbound sail

On moonlit hill I sit with stars
I plead they tell me where you are.

They do not speak, they do not tell
They leave me to my mortal Hell

On moonlit hill I sit alone
Awaiting light to lead me home.

I miss your look, I miss your touch
I guess I loved you far too much

On moonlit hill is where I'll be
If one day you search for me

... and they sent him home happy ... one hundred percent.

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

1 posted 2002-11-27 10:29 PM

So beautiful, yet so very sad.
~Hugs~

EagleScorpion
Senior Member

since 2000-03-08

Posts 1644
Here, Now, Forever

2 posted 2002-11-27 10:35 PM

"On moonlit hill I sit alone
Awaiting light to lead me home.

I miss your look, I miss your touch
I guess I loved you far too much"

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these two stanzas, in particular, caught my eye and stole my breath away

Lady In White

Member Elite

since 2001-02-12

Posts 2799
USA

3 posted 2002-11-27 10:36 PM

TLS...where have you been. It is about time you came home, just in time, for Thanksgiving. Welcome, welcome.

inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-19

Posts 7392
Ohio

4 posted 2002-11-28 10:52 AM

between the shadows of the night,
the moon casts its loving light .
oh the dreamweaving moon..........

Seymour Tabin
Member Empyrean

since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

5 posted 2002-11-28 10:55 AM

The Lonely Stranger
Well done, enjoyed the read.

VAS
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

6 posted 2002-11-28 11:49 AM

Excellently written!

Whether on the shoal or on the shore,
I'll seek the lighthouse evermore.

Mistletoe Angel

Member Empyrean

since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

7 posted 2002-11-28 10:53 PM

(big hugggssssss) Oh Gerald, this is so very sad, sweet friend, I send angel hugs of comfort out to you in hope loves smile fills your heart again real soon! (sigh) God Bless You, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Gerald, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

Riley

Senior Member

since 2002-07-18

Posts 1038
in the pouring rain

8 posted 2002-11-28 11:16 PM

** reads and agrees with critique message ** yup I have to meet you half way with that and keep my big mouth shut....good poem

Riley

Morning mist clings to my face, and my soul opens up to you......

garysgirl

Member Laureate

since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

9 posted 2002-11-28 11:20 PM

I also "prefer lyrical & rhyming poetry", as you say in your critique box. So, I love your poem, even if it was sad. Thank you for sharing with us.

"Love makes the world go around"
~~with love and hugs from Ethel~~

gemjop
Member Elite

since 2002-11-18

Posts 2587
Pencilveinia, USA

10 posted 2002-11-29 08:37 PM

lol at the critique message- i like !!!
also loved the read, especially the ending:
"On moonlit hill is where I'll be
If one day you search for me."
thanks for sharing!
lots of love, gemma xxxxxx

learning each day, for you and i, our paths have met, i've already learnt that you are love.

vandana

Member Patricius

since 1999-10-22

Posts 10463
USA

11 posted 2002-11-30 06:40 PM

enjoyed

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