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Incense |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855
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incense perfume burns my eyes, pushes shapes of her to highs, swimming all around me with strange grace. burning flowers to held mouths, whispered unsung syllables. fragile limning of her unseen face. reminds smoke of cigarette, waterfall in strings unlet. sheer silk curtain twisting on the breeze. loose hair dance against suspend too ornate to comprehend. mathematics turned on X Y Z's. smokestack pumping petals free. breathing spectrum factory. oil's scent reclaimed from ember flower. wrapped to capture excess furls, ashes follow dim bright curls. evening stalls awake within her hour. |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
Yes, you did a very good job of capturing the essence of inscense. I could smell it as you wrote. I absolutely adore insense. It keeps bugs (and my dog) away, and it is so very soothing. Thanks for sharing  Never be normal! |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
good stuff dude.... burning flowers to held mouths, whispered unsung syllables. great line... |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Thank you both. This is an older poem of mine (probably two years old) that I've dusted off and revised. A fellow can learn a lot in two years.  Have a Happy Thanksgiving. Mike |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
incense perfume burns my eyes, pushes shapes of her to highs, swimming all around me with strange grace. I can smell the incense burning now Mikey. Enjoyed this one. Happy Turkey Day. |
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coyote Senior Member
since 2001-03-17
Posts 1077 |
Your words revived a tie-dyed memory of how I burned pine incense at school, because it smelled like a campfire. coyote  "The greatest of all faults is to be conscious of none." |
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whiskey
since 1999-12-28
Posts 1278Australia |
Very well captured,I could smell the faint lingering smell of incense in the air as I read your words |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
I like the scents of this. Dusting sometimes yields polished results. |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Thank you. |
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