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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium 
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there was a hole in the raining sky as an eerie light threw pained rays through tear drops that had settled in her eyes and I saw a rainbow rising from her eyes with colours all split as if joy was divided into layers of pain and I could see lightning crash deep inside her heart like flashlights of a camera caught in retakes of photographs of yesterday’s sun soon the rain stopped and the skies cleared but the rainbow was now replaced by tall shadows coloured in seven shades of grey I could see sorrow permanently framed in halls of memory like long lanes of cacti overgrown in a desert formed as a result of years of drought |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Sudhir, A sad write for the festive holiday comming. How ever it was well done and I enjoyed. |
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garysgirl  
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Sudhir, this is a beautifully written poem with lots of meaning. So sad, though. "Love makes the world go around" |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Thank you both so very much, Seymour and Ethel...  regards, sudhir |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
The whole poem! but especially ...seven shades of gray... Keep writing the  s... |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
This was wonderfull. i could see every movement in this poem, which is a very good trait. Never be normal! |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
yes a keeper for sure... enjoyed tis and the progression of images you allowed us to see.... |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
I do hope that you never stop writing these treasures...... ever...... This is remarkable! |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggsssssss) Oh Sudhir, this is wonderful but so sad, sweet friend, my heart goes out to you and I send angel hugs your way to clear the tears away, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Sudhir, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice expression...James |
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neveah5 Member
since 2002-11-22
Posts 197Ohio |
Lovely piece  How something so sad can be so beautifully written....  |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
"and I could see lightning crash deep inside her heart like flashlights of a camera caught in retakes of photographs of yesterday’s sun" Lens flare, memories overexposed. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
yep, I do love those sad ones... |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Wow! Sudhir...and these lines, double WOW! and I saw a rainbow rising from her eyes with colours all split as if joy was divided into layers of pain fantastically woven! Whether on the shoal or on the shore, |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
My halo's off to you for this one, dear Sudhir! Incredibly moving and descriptive piece of writing. ~ sending warm hugs EA |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Sudhir You see with an inner eye, into the depth, in this poem. |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
Written with a sense of classic literature description, insight, and empathy -- very omniscient... -MVS "AS ABOVE SO BELOW" |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Sudhir, Heartbreaking and beautiful don't seem to go together, except in this descriptive poem.... It is wonderful and I enjoyed it a great deal.... Warm regards, Pat ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Karilea, thank you for your gracious words, as always.... Wind, thanks for the wonderful response, glad you could see the scenes Ron, thanks a lot, its a pleasure to see your name Gentle one, thanks you muchly for your kind response... Noah, thanks a lot for your touching response, as usual... you are really one of the very generous ones here James, thanks so much neveah5, thank you and welcome to passions... Midnitesun, thanks for coming by and picking the lines that you felt with... passing shadows, a for youVirginia, thanks... double thanks EA, thanks for coming by, thanks for the hugs... Martie, you too, my friend, you too ... thanks MVS, thanks for such a nice compliment... Pat, I am glad that you enjoyed this... thanks... Thanks to all, Regards, Sudhir |
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