Across Sand and Snow : Rubiyat

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Open Poetry #23

Across Sand and Snow : Rubiyat

Professor Gloom
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of Depression

0 posted 2002-11-26 12:25 PM

Across the white sand that flows
On foot the traveler goes
Heart and mind set to his home
And the comfort there he knows

Over river with banks wide
His passage won’t be denied
No longer will he now roam
Crossing ferry he does ride

Up and down the tallest hill
No obstacle blocks his will
Climbing the sheer walls of stone
His desire onward still

Across the cold winter snow
Ever on in ice wind blow
Heart and mind set to his home
To his life’s hearth he must go

Gloom
11/26/02

Rubiyat : This Arabic format is a quatrain wherein the first, second, and fourth lines rhyme. The rhyme scheme is thus; a-a-b-a. A single stanza can be a poem in itself or multiple stanzas may be joined to create a larger piece.

Cpat Hair

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1 posted 2002-11-26 12:28 PM

yes..nicely done...

Seymour Tabin
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Tamarac Fla

2 posted 2002-11-26 12:30 PM

Professor Gloom
Well done enjoyed the read.

nakdthoughts
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Between the Lines

3 posted 2002-11-26 12:57 PM

I don't think I have ever tried one of these. Forget the sand...We are expecting snow,
something I get great enjoyment from.

M

majnu

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since 2002-10-13

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SF Bay Area

4 posted 2002-11-26 01:02 PM

i must confess it makes me glad to see this form used outside of asia.

it like the way that the poem is cyclic, you took full advantage of the rhyme scheme with that.

i also liked the images.

-majnu
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Timid thoughts be not afraid. I am a Poet.

Sunshine

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Listening to every heart

5 posted 2002-11-26 10:39 PM

Professor, bring the Rubiyat to the Workshop - I would enjoy plying my pen to this form.

A beautiful poem. Thank you!

Zinsser
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Calif.

6 posted 2002-11-27 09:25 AM

the format and words are wonderful.... : )

Enchantress
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Canada eh.

7 posted 2002-11-27 09:28 AM

Beautiful write Professor.
Much enjoyed this format.
~Hugs~

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