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Hustle Blues
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Hustle Blues |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA 
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The clang, click and clack beyond the clear of sheer glass as a new day of toil awakens to the perk of bean and the fry of yellow sunny sides..... A drip falling into the sound of itself, rounding it’s way to an endless drain of sewer’s maze....as rats scurry for a hurried meal before the shimmer of light casts through the grate. Footfalls sound a waking call to the newspaper clad pair of shoes with no name.. Mere sounds of the bustle before the hustle of life takes a frantic dash to the waiting hiss of steam, electric rails and whirring doors in a maze of steps...as mere boys con for a dime, an old man shakes a pewter cup and the fragrance of delicate lace touches the noses of the few who stop long enough to smell the rose.. before the door closes and another drip falls into a rusting drain.... [This message has been edited by Magnus (11-25-2002 09:00 PM).] |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Very interesting write Barry! Could hear that dripping like a tap in the middle of the night. ~Hugs~ ~Love, like magic, depends on believing~ |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Barry, You perked a good cup of poetry, enjoyed. |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
"A drip falling into the sound of itself" that will be one of my all-time favorite lines of all poems I've read. Liked this a lot. Warm Regards, Pat  ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
This took me to the 40's...such a colorful time played so well in your rhyme. ThisDiamond |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
I agree with thisdiamond... Great piece my friend... jwesley |
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CSKpoet Senior Member
since 2002-07-12
Posts 845Island in Paradise |
You are just so very artful in your imagery, Barry. I could almost feel this with all senses. Excellent! Cher Poetry is: |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
captures a scene and make me feel,hear,and see it... very well done indeed... I enjoyed |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed |
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BloomingRose Member Elite
since 2000-08-09
Posts 3092Florida |
Interesting twist you write here. At first I thought I was in for a mellow morning breakfast, but alas reality set in and the rat race of life began. Enjoyed, now how about breakfast?  Deb |
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