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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298
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her words batter backwards splattering like sleet on a window running down into the crevices clumping together until the temperature rises enough to melt down into the bitterness that truth is despite the pungent dripping her heart grows colder and more unwilling to beat with each day’s passing the dark circles are now just decorations they don’t hurt any more or less than the churning of the internal mixer that she cannot turn off, only lower the speed at which she is being destroyed if you catch her unaware and look deep into her eyes there will be moments when her façade fails and you can see the destruction [This message has been edited by jellybeans (11-25-2002 06:42 PM).] |
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majnu
since 2002-10-13
Posts 1088SF Bay Area |
what does "PTSD" mean? the imagery is harsh and vivid, i almost want to say this belongs in the dark poetry forum. it was good, if sad. -majnu |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
Post Traumatic Stress Disorder....comes from many causes, many suffer from it and don't even know.... and yes, it might, but this is the only forum I post, I will leave it to the discretion of the moderators if they think it needs to be moved |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Jelly Beans....I understand this, know this and have felt this... and I believe it is just fine here in this forum.... Thanx for the emotions of this write and the superbly metaphoric way of saying it all.. |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
yes...you can see the destruction if you look deeply.. in anyone suffering this way. very strongly written... it captures well the feelings of such experiences. |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
It's like reading a playback of my own personal PTSD when 26 long-stay patients of mine for whom I had a great deal of affection, died in a fire the night I had booked off as charge nurse! The nurse that covered for me that night had to go through an inquest and had a nervous breakdown. I am still haunted by this and your poem brought back those painful memories---very vivid portrayal of PTSD! Earth Angel |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
magnus, thank you, am always sorry when someone relates to poems as these, but they well up and must come out yep cpat...the eyes tell it all...sigh ea, am so sorry to hear of your tragedy...have you been able to write about it, and does or will it help? Am really sorry to hear of your pain, forgive me for the remembrance |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
jellybeans - excellent discription of a disorder that can spoil the joy that life has to offer. I can relate all too well with this poem. Chris "Hope" is the thing with feathers- |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Rest, knowing that no apology is needed or desired...thanx for a heartfelt write.. |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Very well written jellybeans...have known a couple suffers of PTSD in my life, and you portrayed them quite well. jwesley |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
JB, I think you did many people a favor by writing this. There is so much help available now days. Even if someone doesn't know the name of their symptoms, they still are symptoms which do not need to be lived with. Often it is only a matter of 4-6 appts. with a therapist to get past this, my therapist told me and it was true. Flashbacks, spaciness, time stands still and somehow you are 2 hours later in life and couldn't tell anyone where you had been mentally, cause you don't know, trembling at the sight of a particular person not related to the trauma, but a reminder of a feature, and the list goes on and on....I didn't mean to re-write your poem for you, but the list does go on and on. I would hope by you sharing this, someone will go seek help. If you are experiencing this yourself I commend you for having the courage to write it. You are a very talented writer. Keep writing for these poems always help me know I am not alone in what I, or others, I know, went and/or are going through. There is such a thing as a sliding scale fee program for those who say they can't afford a therapist. It is critical to talk to a professional. It is possible to know peace. Hugs and warm regards, Pat  ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Dear sweet jellybeans, what a kind and thoughtful reply you made to mine. No appology is necessary. This was a very well written account of what many of us have experienced one way or another. We all write poetry that can affect some people in unpleasant ways i.e. poetry on children may sadden a woman who is unable to bear a child, or poems on love may sadden someone who has lost a love...We don't own people's reactions to our words, we simply write what is in our hearts or on our minds and hope for the best. You have a kind heart and you are a talented poetess. Earth Angel |
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Balladeer
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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Yes, it needs to be moved....into my library. This is very excellent writing, miss. Thank you.....  |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I've read this many times since I first saw it yesterday afternoon... and it still causes chills, no matter how warm the room. That, dear lady, is superb poetry that comes from knowing, not imagination. Magnificent write! |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
JB, after reading this wonderful work of yours over and over, I don't really know how to reply......except to say that you captured the feelings and emotions of a lot of people in your poem. And, also, that you did an excellent job of doing so. I would like to second Earth Angel's second reply to you, though.......friend, you shouldn't apologize about a poem written from your heart, as you have written this, I believe. If we tried to please everyone who might read our poetry, we would never write again, because it would be absolutely impossible. Even if the words really touch a person, our words may help that person to get through the feelings and emotions that they are experiencing. Thank you very much for sharing your heart with us. "Love makes the world go around" ~~with love and hugs from Ethel~~ [This message has been edited by garysgirl (11-26-2002 09:50 AM).] |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
well I tried to write it without a ‘cause’, because for each it is different, and without a solution, because again, for each it is different, but recognition, I believe, is the first step… Nightshade, thank you, too many I fear, relate to this Magnus, thank youjwesley, thank you Pat, thank you for the comments and yes you are right, a little bit of help goes a long way. I do believe I am on the ‘up’ side of this and that writing has been my vehicle for getting there…readers who reach out and support are priceless, thank you for your wonderful heart EA, I just closed my eyes and felt your pain, and I understand so well why it would want to stay hidden, sometimes though, a remembrance dealt with is another part of the healing…thank you for your kindness Bal, thank you…good to see you out and about suthern, lady I think you are closer than most to the ‘realness’ that this portrays, thank you, for your love and your compliments gg, thank you lady, for your comments and your wonderful caring heart |
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Sandpiper Senior Member
since 2002-06-15
Posts 738land of flora and fauna |
The emotion and pain in this just reaches in and grabs the reader--the pain is all too real--excellent! |
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RSWells Member Elite
since 2001-06-17
Posts 2533 |
You articulate this muffled scream, a statue with real eyes and pain at it's core. Well done. |
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amusemi Senior Member
since 2001-12-08
Posts 1262A State of Disarray |
I, too, am glad you shared this piece with us. It really struck a chord in my heart. Just believe... |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
This goes beyond the hanky alert and far into the grief of dark. Well done, Poet. A  indeed... |
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