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The Mire of Retire
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The Mire of Retire |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla 
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The Mire of Retire In the mire of retire An aging foot stands quagmire The tire of a larger cast Weighted down in somber past. The quickened pace has slowed to crawl A sprint would only haste a fall And energy to stay the race Is limited in time and space. And though the search is still suspense The feelings are less intense But still they ache to carry on They never leave or really gone. A sloth that moves at lesser rate A turtle in a slower state But feelings run just as high That peels the purple rose of why. While vivid turns a subtle gray And footsteps weigh of yesterday. |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
nicely done Sy... I enjoyed |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
I love the title ... and all the thoughts and internal rhymes within Sy. What an excellent piece to ponder on. Loved this!  Best wishes, /Kit |
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Decaflame Senior Member
since 2001-05-11
Posts 1635 |
Why the weary sigh? |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Love this morning read Sy! I'm late...off and running.... ~Morning hugs!~ ~Love, like magic, depends on believing~ |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Seymour - a lovely read with tea and toast, or for that matter anytime. Speaking of time, I like my sister Enchantress am late!! Although we are miles and miles apart, our internal clocks seem to tick at the same tock!! Oh, heavens..I am rambling. Thankyou for your wonderful words. Chris  "Hope" is the thing with feathers- |
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RSWells Member Elite
since 2001-06-17
Posts 2533 |
Perhaps, but your mind surely races. |
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sigheyes Member
since 2001-04-25
Posts 323the winds of destiny |
The internal rhymes are very effective. Thank you for this write. I enjoyed it. |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Good morning Sy. Beautiful write for us to all enjoy. |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (smiles) Nothing ever really retires, everything only has its own time! (big hugggsssssss) This is lovely, sweet friend, I love it, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Seymour, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Thank you, Mr. Seymour. Now I've got to go catch up on what you wrote the three days I was gone..... "Love makes the world go around" |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Mr. T., I can see your poetry on aging being a wonderful addition to some of the fine magazines that are published for the older generation! They are simply wonderful! EA |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
To all the above my sincere thank for your time and effort. I had written an answer to each of you but pushed a wrong button and wiped it out. Get you all next time. LOL at myself. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Sy, our guy one swipe and wiped? There's a poem in there, I swear! |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Sunshine You are a poem. |
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Auguste
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
The pace may slow...but the imagination only soars. Enjoyed every word, Sy. The stars will shine when I am gone, |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Auguste Thank you for the read and reply. |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Enjoyed a lot. So talented with words, you are. Internal rhymes were mentioned above. I looked, I saw them and wondered: How does he do that so smoothly? Do that, period! Such a treat. Thank you, Pat ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Sy....I am starting to relate to these feelings.....maybe not at the "pace" you refer to, but none the less....I do understand this poem very well...and you are most certainly correct... |
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Paul Wilson
since 2002-07-07
Posts 4711United States |
Seymour...Enjoyed very much. We race towards retirement, then when we get there we wish the race wasn't over, because we are in a quagmire wanting something to do...Paul [This message has been edited by Paul Wilson (11-25-2002 08:50 PM).] |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Mr. T., I read your above reply and if it is any consolation, I've done the same thing myself! It appears I have been in good company! hehe EA |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Pat, Your reply is the treat. Barry, Always enjoy your reply. Paul, True, thanks for the read. Earth Angel Every once in a while I catch myself, LOL Thanks for the read. |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
For some reason I relate to this poem more on a Monday (after Tori goes back home on a Sunday) and understand that old cliche "you're not getting any younger" more on Monday too  Your mind is still going at peak performance and speed for someone who claims to have slowed down. Heck you are one romantic guy and if I wasn't so scared of Isabel I would kidnap ya! |
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Constance Member
since 2001-07-28
Posts 393Ohio |
Loved reading this one. In particular- "While vivid turns a subtle gray And footsteps weigh of yesterday." |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Sharon, That's the nicest thing I read today. Constance Loved your reply. |
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