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something, we don't know (I usualy don't write like this at all)
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something, we don't know (I usualy don't write like this at all) |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981
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Wide eyes of blackness, see everything inside the weather is cold, her skin as pale as ice is she real?, we can't decide you see her reflection, standing there, alone when you break the mirror, then she is gone. blacker than night, inside is full of woe, she could be a mirroge, or just the mirror's foe, is she real, is she a fake, she scares us, this we know, but sometimes we will follow her, and no one's yet said no Sometimes I give myself the chills. I get scared, and put it on paper. Never be normal! |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
You write of things that are mirage and fears come tumbling, a barrage of unknowns and chilling feel, you write them well, you make them real... ~*~ You're going to go a long way, young lady. Keep writing. |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
I think you are very talented. I like the way you wrote this and you captured the way many of us feel sometimes. It is very good. Warm regards, Pat  ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
thank you, I might write a sequal to this, If I feel like it sometime.... Never be normal! |
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Salty Senior Member
since 2002-11-23
Posts 669Texas |
Your words bring a chilling effect. I don't think you meant you were staring yourself in the mirror, but it sure made me think of this. That is because I have looked in the mirror and questioned who I was ....at times. A very creative write ....disturbing and curious as the wind can be. *S* |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggssssssss) Oh Liz, this is wonderful, sweet friend, I too usually don't like to write this style at all but write honestly what comes to my mind and I too have the grunge style in me! (sigh) May all your fears forever be chased away with hope, sweet friend, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Liz, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Wind, you blew onto the world stage with your poetry and have blown us all away with, not only your incredible talent as a writer, but with the fascinating machinations of such a young mind! Earth Angel |
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