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A Bite of Love
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A Bite of Love |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla 
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A Bite of Love I wallow in a hollow bowl The clamor wears my very soul A cry in fly that dyed me pale This harpoon struck, my heart in wail. The echoes spin a seamless web A tide that never seems to ebb A sound that haunts my dreams at night A sound that flaunts and will not right There is no way that I can say I’d give my life to change that day To hold her hand and say I’m there To dull her pain at least to share I kiss her on the cheek each day To ask forgiveness in a way I do not think she understands Each kisses bit of contraband. I sorrow she will never know The love I have and cannot show. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
A Bite of love a bit of wisdom... keep sharing Sy... |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I wallow in a hollow bowl The clamor wears my very soul A cry in fly that dyed me pale This harpoon struck, my heart in wail. The echoes spin a seamless web A tide that never seems to ebb A sound that haunts my dreams at night A sound that flaunts and will not right ======================================== I kiss her on the cheek each day To ask forgiveness in a way I do not think she understands Each kisses bit of contraband. I sorrow she will never know The love I have and cannot show. ====================================== A cry in fly that dyed me pale This harpoon struck, my heart in wail. what a very clever couplet of word play, turn of phrase, personification, metaphor and rhyme... WAAAAAY COOL!!  as is the imagery in these lines: The echoes spin a seamless web A tide that never seems to ebb and this whole verse is worth is weight in poetic gold: I kiss her on the cheek each day To ask forgiveness in a way I do not think she understands Each kisses bit of contraband. my way cool line of the day: Each kisses bit of contraband. me thinks you just told her Stinkylove...in this bittersweet beauty of heart on sleeve rhymes divine. you rock and it rolls me    I'm not crazy, I'm just a little unwell |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
Still adjusting to this morning thing, Sy. Maybe if I had them start a coffee IV, a couple hours before I got up, I could be this prolific at such an hour...yeah, sure! |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Sunshine, JM, I think and wink, wink and think And Randy thinks I need a shrink Perhaps I do in thoughts of you My mothy me that flies the blue. WWRS Duncan, Get a coffee pot with a timer, that should do it. LOL Thanks. |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Seymour - if she reads your well written poetry, she will know... BC |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Bill, Perhaps, it's worth a try, thank you. |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Sy, I think simply by reading your poetry over time any one has to know what a loving, sensitive, caring man you are and I believe we all receive a kiss on our very souls every time you produce and share with us your brilliant poems Thanking you as always for your gifts to us..... Warm regards, Pat  ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
A lovely comment Pat, thank you. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
check your email Stinky |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (sigh) This is sooooooooo beautifully sensitive, sweet friend, you speak romnance with such devotion and heart here, God Bless You, I wish this happiness to always fill you, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Seymour, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
JM, I did and could only bring up the one picture on the beach. I'll write tonight if I get a chance. WWRS Noal, Thank you for the read always enjoy your comments. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
 a sad one from you Seymour. You know I like those. |
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