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Lines Of Her |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
The smile was all it took. Some mornings there is A break of day That shatters windowed eyes When in the mirror The lines on your face Are an omen of the Wrinkled reality The day will bring. Other times A few lines on the mirror might Have added to the way The day was faced But those times are gone So nicotine and caffeine Have become the Choice Getting my morning black Involved stopping at the Quick-Mart where the Kids hang out before class Talking trash as they Act tough. Reminding me that youth Is long gone from me And that talking tough Or speaking trash Doesn’t prepare you for the Lines that come later She won’t be there But somewhere I have a picture of her smile and I underline the thought of it. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Cpat Hair Well done, good read. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
You're beautiful when you're anguished. okay..anguished is too strong a word, but it fit, so there it is. "underline the thought of it" you inspire envy in me... |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Sy.. thanks friend for the nice words.. Ser.. a long ramble to say little I fear or not enough... a lot there that isn't needed, just rambles.. no need to envy... |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Reminding me that youth Is long gone from me And that talking tough Or speaking trash Doesn't prepare you for the Lines that come later She won't be there But somewhere I have a picture of her smile and I underline the thought of it. ================================= me thinks Iambe and a few other muses smile at you too.... Im smiling at your poetic lines.  I'm not crazy, I'm just a little unwell |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
And that talking tough Or speaking trash Doesn’t prepare you for the Lines that come later This is SO true!! This is the wisdom of your poem - no matter what stage of youth you're in - beginning youth - up to the age of 20. Intermediate youth - ages 20 - 50. Experienced youth - 50 and up! |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
JM..if they smile they must also shake their heads..wondering when I am ever going to learn to write.. thanks gentle one..for the nice words |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Ms Devine... thanks for taking time to read..the wisdom of the poem is in learning that and other lessons...like what lines to follow... thanks for the reply |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggsssssss) I too don't like to talk trash and don't swear, it just sounds pointless to me and I want to accept the lines and circles as I grow on but also hold onto the youth that rests in me! (sigh) This is heartfelt, sweet friend, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Ron, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." Shakira [This message has been edited by Mistletoe Angel (11-22-2002 03:41 PM).] |
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Sybil Member
since 2002-09-12
Posts 73Midwest |
...A break of day That shatters windowed eyes When in the mirror The lines on your face Are an omen of the Wrinkled reality... and what better way than to face it all head on? Thank you, Cap'n. Your insights mirror me closer than the silver backing... [This message has been edited by Sybil (11-22-2002 03:44 PM).] |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
She won’t be there But somewhere I have a picture of her smile and I underline the thought of it. Lovely. Yep, life is full of lines. The ones on our faces - the map and autobiography. I hate growing old. I don't want to! Cor |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Noah..thanks friend for the thoughtful reply. Sybil.. thank you Corinne.. all sorts things we don't want to do aren't there, but we do them.. thanks for the thoughts... |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
Ron: what a treat to read your poetry on a lunch break from one form of mental focus and a delve into another! That last stanza made my heart drop in understanding... Time again for my well-intended friendly prod to you to finally compile a book of your work already! -MVS "AS ABOVE SO BELOW" |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
late lunch break isn't it Mark? Appreciate your kind words... one of these days I may do a book... but for now no plans to. |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
nice read |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
thank Vandana... glad you liked |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
If the story of Dorian Grey has any credence at all then, there must be, somewhere near, a portrait of me, pristine Ed |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
great lines! |
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Sandpiper Senior Member
since 2002-06-15
Posts 738land of flora and fauna |
Youth's bold and time's bittersweet realizations--enjoyed! "I am a sky where spirits live. |
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Constance Member
since 2001-07-28
Posts 393Ohio |
YOU might call it ramblings, but I call it spontaneous, real, and thought-provoking. I suspect that you are less lined and more youthful than your mirror allows. |
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kayjay Member Elite
since 2002-06-24
Posts 2015Oregon |
Reminding me that youth Is long gone from me And that talking tough Or speaking trash Doesn’t prepare you for the Lines that come later Fateful words to all who draw breath and have a few years behind them. Great write...KJ Through rubble and trouble and dark of night |
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