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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298
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Communiqué one read of him and she knew that he knew that he could easily have her the manner of his words filled her mind with adverb packed dreams softly aching to be passionately lovingly used by the confidence and charm that literally oozed from his verbiage coyly she counted her choices and angled away from previous handling errors prolonging the game she closed her eyes carefully crossed her t’s and leaned heavily for support on her not yet |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I so enjoy reading you... thanks for the morning break! |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
I really like the hopeful disquiet that you've penned here. Hope that your choices narrow and that your prolonged longing is shortened Ed |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Enjoyed this... a bit of hopeful in your words is always nice to see... |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
hmmmmm 'hopeful disquiet' that does describe it well....you read deep wranx  cpat, yes hopeful is good....it is much 'up' from the depths I have been residing in sunshine thank you, glad you enjoyed the read |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Wow! This poem certainly dotted my "i"'s...you do have a way... |
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Contabo Member
since 2001-11-21
Posts 159 |
ooooo she did it again. I have been waiting....and reading. Contabo |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
prolonging the game she closed her eyes carefully crossed her t’s and leaned heavily for support on her not yet Sometimes, the anticipation, is it's own reward. Really like this alot. |
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Sandpiper Senior Member
since 2002-06-15
Posts 738land of flora and fauna |
Awesome write, beginning to end! "I am a sky where spirits live. |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
thank you all......hmmm, never expected this to get good response....and this weekend I looked it over and thought it would be more accurate if I replaced the 'coyly' with 'carefully', but it is too late to edit... thank you all again....sigh...you all are a welcome sight to tire monday eyes |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I don't know whether to compliment you or kick you! LOL The poem is fantastic... but it left that old song "Anticipation" stuck in my mind... and unfortunately, after all the commercialization of it, I keep seeing a ketchup bottle refusing to drip... and that's not the visualization this poem deserves! LOL Seriously... I do like this... it's sensual and sassy and full of "just suppose." *S* |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Not only did I thoroughly enjoy and appreciate your talented write, I also enjoyed Suthern's humorous comparison to the anticipation of a ketchup bottle giving up its treasure! LOL |
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majnu
since 2002-10-13
Posts 1088SF Bay Area |
coyly she counted her choices and angled away from previous handling errors ...the games we play. nice. -majnu |
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