Open Poetry #23 |
Saturday Night at the Golden Boar |
Tim Senior Member
since 1999-06-08
Posts 1794 |
Saturday night, it's disco night, at the Golden Boar saloon, Polyester suits; snake cowboy boots, and the band ain't playin' no cowboy tune, Saturday Night Fever meets the Urban Cowboy as I saunter on over to the bar, up on the stage, a drag queen twangs, on a twelve string steel guitar. I spot her there, fire engine red hair, in a gold sequined fake wonder bra, Her slightly irregular mounds of tempting flesh, make this here cowboy swaller his chaw, I'm drawn to her, like a gull to a dump, (let me rephrase that 'cause it ain't politically correct) like a socially conscious gull, to a sanitary landfill, (now that there is a heck of lot properer I suspect) I go to her, she comes to me, we meet in the middle of the floor, We embrace, our lips then lock, like a deadbolt on the local bank's door, We both hear sirens, see flashing red lights, as we both feel in our loins hot heat. We start to hum, "Smoke gets in your eyes" in a kind of perverted retro catchy disco beat. Our passions were doused, by the firemen's hose, as a congflagration had engulfed the Golden Boar Bar, We both left, Went our separate ways, I waved goodbye as I got in my rusted out car, No phone numbers exchanged, No address, no name, I never saw her again, it just made me sick, like swallowing chaw, I lost my true love, I fear that our romance, had just got too hot too quick. Just had the urge to pen one of the cotton candy sing song type of love poems that I enjoy so much. [This message has been edited by Tim (11-21-2002 08:44 AM).] |
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quietlydying
since 2001-06-10
Posts 935the wonderful land of oz |
i really enjoyed the beginning of this. it flowed so well. the end went a little astray in my opinion, but it's your piece. loved the lines quote: thanks for sharing. /jen/ i'm so bitterly disappointed. betty, i think it's time you leave now. |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Now, Tim, I thought this was cute. But, I like "cotton candy sing song type of love poems" myself. "Love makes the world go around" |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
he he - something tells me you might have been dissapointed anyway with the end result. Now how cute was this? |
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Sandpiper Senior Member
since 2002-06-15
Posts 738land of flora and fauna |
smiling here--enjoyed! "I am a sky where spirits live. |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA |
thanks 4 making me smile! lots of love, gemmaxx learning each day, for you and i, our paths have met, i've already learnt that you are love. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Tim Well done, enjoyed the read. |
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Eliza Member
since 2002-11-18
Posts 58 |
Only you, Sir, only you could shed light on the subject so well. Smiling, enjoying the laughter... |
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