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Galaxies Of Self [Terza Rima]
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Galaxies Of Self [Terza Rima] |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989
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Galaxies Of Self Carry me on the winds of tomorrow leave behind me a haunted; tear stained plight freeing dreams, filled with yesterdays sorrow. Dance me through the stars in beauty of night erase the harbored pain of my memoirs keep me entranced, by magic of twilight. The secret of me lies within the stars faded light, lavished in Luna's caress, powers healing the deeply hidden scars. Fly me through galaxies of happiness let stardust brighten the darkest of shell where even broken spirits can regress. Hold me in mystical moments of spell when memories suffered become past things now residing, love and laughter to dwell. Carry me on flight of eternal wings. Carry me on the journeys that life brings. "When we're torn apart, shattered and scarred, love has the grace to save us" Saints and Angels as sung by Sarah Evans [This message has been edited by Gentle Spirit (11-20-2002 06:26 AM).] |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
lovely and uplifting |
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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
Very lovely words, You could reinsert the line Carry me on the winds of tomorrow In the last stanza It fits very well and links back to the first stanza But it is very lovely the way it stands Gloom |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (smiles) Oh Donna, this is gorgeous, sweet friend, yay, I felt I was floating in your words and I could see everything as I was moving in space! (kiss on cheek) This is wonderful, sweet friend, yay, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Donna, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Love it Donna! Excellent flow..just beautiful! ~Hugs~ ~Love, like magic, depends on believing~ |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Carry me on the winds of tomorrow leave behind me a haunted; tear stained plight freeing dreams, filled with yesterdays sorrow. Dance me through the stars in beauty of night erase the harbored pain of my memoirs keep me entranced, by magic of twilight. The secret of me lies within the stars faded light, lavished in Luna's caress, powers healing the deeply hidden scars. =================================== Donna, this is so lovely..so delicate and woven with such pretty poetic phrasing, vocabulary as well as your imagery. Someones going to the head of the class  very very well done poetess of the gentle spirit  No one has ever shown me how to see the world the way I see it now ... |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Terza meets Rima... and grace carries on... |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Donna, this is just simply beautiful. "Love makes the world go around" |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA |
speechless. lots of love gem xxxxxxxx learning each day, for you and i, our paths have met, i've already learnt that you are love. |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Hold me in mystical moments of spell when memories suffered become past things now residing, love and laughter to dwell. Donna - this is simply beautiful. I can identify with these words. Into my library it goes!! hugs, Chris "Hope" is the thing with feathers- |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Gentle Spirit A gentle poem indeed. A lovely poem of seed Enjoyed. |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
IG, thank you much and welcome to Passions. Proff, this form was a real challenge for me, but I was rather determined to try. I had a hard enough time learning it. I didn't realize linking back would be appropriate for the form. lol......You know me, always learning.... Noah my treasured friend, thank you. You are to good to me. Nancy, thanks sweetie, it sure wasn't easy!! Oh Jan if you only knew how hard this was for me. In reality I went to the back of the calss to start all over rhyme scheme? *groans* but hey....... thats what class is for. Thanks big time JM. LOL. Kari hon I am afraid "grace" might have heard a few words I muttered while reworking this. Thank YOU for always getting me pointed in the right direction and not letting me screw up to much! Ethel, I thank you sweet lady. Gem thank you and welcome to our Passions home. "When we're torn apart, shattered and scarred, love has the grace to save us" Saints and Angels as sung by Sarah Evans [This message has been edited by Gentle Spirit (11-20-2002 02:17 PM).] |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Chris may happiness always follow you wherever your heart leads you. Hugs you. Sey you made me smile. Thank you and I am glad that you enjoyed.. |
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