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The Poet's Spirit
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The Poet's Spirit |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space 
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Their Kerosine lies light the fires that burn our ambitions and darken our thoughts Yet nothing can mar the poet's spirit For within these flames dreams are tempered and inspiration forged a shining sword that cuts the page and lets our souls bleed through.. [This message has been edited by Aenimal (11-20-2002 01:34 AM).] |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
YES! You can never take the soul of a poet. This is wonderful! "When we're torn apart, |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I'm confused. Poets lie? Now, if the kerosine lays in wait of a spark that the flame might be bright in the poet's write now that I would understand! |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Who is the "Their"--to whom you are referring? It sounds as though you are saying poets lie? I must say however, from the 5th line down, I found this to be wonderfully written--clear, forceful, full of passion and captures the true soul of a poet! Well done! Earth Angel |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA |
I totally understand what you're saying. 'Their' refers to those who burn our ambitions.You show them as the liars, not the poets. I found your poem motivating and refreshing, confrontational and soulful. Thankyou for such an original and proud piece. lots of love, gemmaxxxxxxxxx learning each day, for you and i, our paths have met, i've already learnt that you are love. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Aenimal Enjoyed the read, well done. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Ok, different slant through others' eyes... now I see how the kerosine lies...  |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
'Their' is left to the reader's interpratation. Whether a specific person, group or generally oppressive force, 'their' is the villian of this poem. The poet is the hero of this poem and as such the 'their' of this poem its villian. Thus despite the flames of their lies the poet is not defeated but strengthened. I wrote it late last night and I guess it needs a major rewrite. |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Thanks gemjop you've got it. Maybe I can phrase it another way? If anybody's has any suggestions i'm open to your thoughts. |
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