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In The Fierce Grip Of This
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In The Fierce Grip Of This |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL 
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I am touching the music as it pulsates in my cradling ears. There is a precision in each word the way the voice's lips curve around the sounds sucking all feeling from them exhaling them into the air around me making tears long to trace the stone curves of a face carved into a frown. And my hands are sliding all over the air sort of sleazy in their search to grasp the notes and swallow hard in hopes of being intoxicated with some unmatched and unmanned desire to let go standing nude in thought my dancing form wrapped in silken words sends itself in a flurry of moments across an uncrowded room full of windows. I feel like a piece of art a moving display hovering longingly over each new verse being bent and teased by each strain of desperation as love song sweetness touches my soul makes me love you more makes me want you right here/there right now...touching the music with me quietly now breathing wrapped in the silk of our favorite songs tied by the words bound by the need for our skin to dance close fingers entwined, forehead to forehead, blinded by the desperation to feel together and totally loose ourselves in the aftermath of words. Cruel lips mouth the echos of the notes that first stirred us and then settle into a kiss. "two hearts will build the foundation for one point of light |
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Auguste 
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
This is very sensual, VERY, and it's a poem that causes me to think, pause, because it brings so many thoughts to mind that I want to embrace...this is a cool poem, Jenn. I love it.  |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
woman...you write like silk !!! helen |
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Moonlight Romeo
since 2001-09-10
Posts 982The heart of you |
When music speaks, the heart hears, and the body listens. Thank you. What light through yon window breaks? It is the east, and Juliet is the sun. |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Jennifer, I love the way you expressed so much feeling and emotion in this poem. "Love makes the world go around" |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
WOW!! Very beautiful and oh so sensual write Jenn! Well done sweet poetess. ~Hugs~ ~Love, like magic, depends on believing~ |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
very smooth.... the words just slide down the page and into the readers mind.. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
There is a precision in each word the way the voice's lips curve around the sounds sucking all feeling from them exhaling them into the air around me making tears long to trace the stone curves of a face carved into a frown. ==================================== Cruel lips mouth the echos of the notes that first stirred us and then settle into a kiss. ============================== Youve got some very cool lines and images in this...love the way you built up the pace till it creshendos into that poetically perfect closing verse. love the title too.. very cool write...well done Poetess Jenn No one has ever shown me how to see the world the way I see it now ... |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
for some reason when I replied to this it didnt bump up...gremlins?  *trying again* |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (smiles) This is soooooooo sensually beautiful, sweet friend, I wish for this love to fill your heart and to make you happy forever and kiss you with sunshine! (big hugggssssss) I send many angel hugs your way, sweet friend, this is lovely, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Jennifer, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
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