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bsquirrel

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

0 posted 2002-11-19 01:53 PM

He walks along the public road
in his brass-buttoned coat.
Pulling fast against the chill
of winter's white and lonely stare.

Past the smell of smoke and warmth,
the sun a coin below his hat.
That light causes his eyes to close.
He averts them to the curb.

A chair leg smashed among strewn bricks.
Standing pools of ice reflect
storefront shelled to some collapse,
leaning in the public road.

Past the silent sustained dust,
past the smell of smoke and warmth.
Walking up that public road,
to the low tanks travelling home.

TwoHeartsOnePen
Member

since 2002-06-07

Posts 60
state of determination

1 posted 2002-11-19 02:13 PM

your pen paints a vivid picture.

I love this.

Love is patient, indeed. It endures the distance when it seems we cannot endure it ourselves.

Madame Chipmunk
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-12-05

Posts 8296
Michigan

2 posted 2002-11-19 02:17 PM

This sounds too real, Mr.Squirrel...
Oh the bitterness of war!

~ loving rodent hugs

Lyra

copyright2002 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled" Gwendolyn Brooks

Radrook
Senior Member

since 2002-08-09

Posts 648

3 posted 2002-11-20 06:29 AM

Wow!

Sandpiper
Senior Member

since 2002-06-15

Posts 738
land of flora and fauna

4 posted 2002-11-20 07:59 AM

Wow indeed!

"I am a sky where spirits live.
Stare into this deepening blue,
while the breeze says a secret."
Jelaluddin Rumi

regards2you
Member Elite

since 2002-10-01

Posts 3940
California

5 posted 2002-11-20 08:14 AM

Michael,

Every line of this poem is a photo!
You did not waste one word.

And every line I walked right along side him, shivering, and I saw:

~the silent sustained dust~

I enjoyed this a great deal and re-read it several times.

Thank You,
Pat

..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons..
"Desiderata"

garysgirl

Member Laureate

since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

6 posted 2002-11-20 08:31 AM

Michael, yo really did paint a picture here
with your words. Very good poem.
Thanks for sharing with us.

"Love makes the world go around"
~~with love and hugs from Ethel~~

Earth Angel
Member Empyrean

since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

7 posted 2002-11-20 08:37 AM

This is not a pretty picture that you paint, but you are one helluvan artiste!

EA

bsquirrel

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

8 posted 2002-11-20 12:13 PM

Thanks, everyone.

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

9 posted 2002-12-20 04:49 AM

another awesome write!

bsquirrel

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

10 posted 2002-12-20 11:42 AM

Thanks, ps.

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