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Two Scorpions
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Two Scorpions |
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Radrook Senior Member
since 2002-08-09
Posts 648 |
Two scorpions, one jet black the other bright yellow, locked pincers in the desert darkness Probing frantically they maneuvered armored arthropod bodies swiveling cheletinous exoskeletons curved sting prodding arachnid minds meaningfully unaware of the uncaring, descending leather boot about to splatter their moist bestial entrails into the dry desert floor. [This message has been edited by Radrook (11-19-2002 05:26 PM).] |
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furlong Member
since 2001-04-08
Posts 129 |
wow  WOW WOW WOW This is jus so kewl wow "inpervious inards!" wow good bless! |
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Radrook Senior Member
since 2002-08-09
Posts 648 |
Hi! Thanks for feedback! I took a second look at that phrase you mentioned and chose to modify it. In fact I modified the whole write. God bless! BTW There is far more involved here than meets the eye. [This message has been edited by Radrook (11-19-2002 05:21 PM).] |
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furlong Member
since 2001-04-08
Posts 129 |
this poem has a funny shap, y dont u put all the lins to the left?  but i agree that its better like you hav writen it now. |
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garysgirl  
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Whew, Radrook, I'm sure glad that leather boot got those little critters. Those things are deadly,aren't they? I don't know much about them. I think you wrote this very well. I could almost see the scorpions right here. I'm glad they weren't really here, though. I don't like those things. "Love makes the world go around" |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
I think this has a much deeper meaning. I enjoyed it a great deal. Warm Regards, Pat  ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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majnu
since 2002-10-13
Posts 1088SF Bay Area |
agreement with pat. i wonder what our leather boot will be; maybe the sci-fi authors will have the last laugh. -majnu |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
This poem appealed to my artistic side and to my scientific one as well! Dynamic write! EA |
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Radrook Senior Member
since 2002-08-09
Posts 648 |
Thanks for the feedback. Yes, there is a deeper meaning. Here is one aspect of it: From a Christian point of view humanity may bicker as it will but there is always a higher power which can stop the bickering when least expected in a most drastic way. From a SCI Fi viewpoint we really don't know whether somewhere out there are indeed others who might view us as vermin and can dispose of us as easily. From a philosophical viewpoint, are we really free? Do our struggles really determine the outcome of our efforts? Or is there the leather boot of fate which always intervenes and forces things to conclude in a predetermined way. From a moral viewpoint, the question of does might make right is involved. If we have the power to crush, does that justify our crushing? Does might make right? It might seem as if we as a species have gone beyond this--but have we really? If we view human history we see most disagreements being resolved via pincers and stings. Even today we are at the brink of another Middle East conflict. Is violence the ONLY way? If it is, then we cannot condemn the use of the leather boot because it is violent can we? Glad you enjoyed! God Bless! [This message has been edited by Radrook (11-20-2002 01:32 PM).] |
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