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Turn Around |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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Turn Around I wipe the music from my eyes it plays too moody and I would turn up corners and lip-balm all this chapped road oh no not the road again that winds you say knowing how many times I’ve traveled looking looking for something that forms phlegm in my spirit spit it out yes this dance around the yard all flower even in fall he grazes and yearns to feel the callus that burns his palm from the rake around you know and sometimes I am jealous of the garrulous garden the way he holds it and touches the dirt with his big hands and he listens to the chatter of the new green sprout yet cuts himself again with the thorns now densely reaching through all those weeds of summer take me they say oh and he does with his tenderness he bleeds the music calls to me with words that fill the palace and fall out the open window into the cool-down sun and sometimes they are so big and sometimes so quiet that he needs to stand still long enough to hear my love voiced across the falling leaf lawn onto the place where he digs for good feeling turn around now I think to his silhouette against the melting crayon sky turn around and see my love |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Left me aching for planting... (why o why does everything I type come out that way???) But I understand this all too well... the longing for just a bit of nurture. I'm keeping this one too mmmmmmarvelous martie! *library* |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
"turn around now I think to his silhouette against the melting crayon sky turn around and see my love" ============================================ You know I love the entire piece Martie! But these lines...oh these lines..Fantastic! ~Hugs~ ~Love, like magic, depends on believing~ |
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scorpio Member Ascendant
since 2002-10-02
Posts 5178right...there |
beautifully written...enjoyed this very much... ...believe what your heart feels... |
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garysgirl  
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Martie, you do have a way of expressing your thoughts and feelings. I love it. Thanks for sharing. "Love makes the world go around" |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
"the music calls to me with words that fill the palace and fall out the open window into the cool-down sun and sometimes they are so big and sometimes so quiet that he needs to stand still long enough to hear"  (big hugggssssss) Oh Martie, I think we can all relate to these feelings where one can feel so shy or scared to turn around and all one needs is a lot of courage and knowing one is truly loved to show that lucid smile! (sigh) I send angel hugs your way, sweet friend, this is beautiful, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Martie, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
I wipe the music from my eyes Only you, Martie... could have come up with something as lovely as that phrase  ~ loving chipmunk hugsLyra |
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Lady In White
since 2001-02-12
Posts 2799USA |
Every time every time I read you every time I read you and become Martieized I cry |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
and sometimes I am jealous of the garrulous garden the way he holds it and touches the dirt with his big hands and he listens to the chatter of the new green sprout yet cuts himself again with the thorns now densely reaching through all those weeds of summer take me they say oh and he does with his tenderness he bleeds =================================== my love voiced across the falling leaf lawn onto the place where he digs for good feeling turn around now I think to his silhouette against the melting crayon sky turn around and see my love ================================ trust me baby...HE FELT it...just like we did all the way from there...... man I love the way you write! big heart hugs No one has ever shown me how to see the world the way I see it now ... |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Marti, ..."oh no, not the road again"... .."looking for something that forms phlegm in my spirit spit it out".. This says so much; that it were just that easy, huh? ...spit it out, not ready for more growth... Who could not know the depth of your love, just by reading you? and who could not know the depth of his love, just by reading you? He felt you. How could he not with the kind of heart and soul you exude every time you write a poem. I've re-read this a few times. You've added such detail, too much to mention. So creative, you are. Thank you so very much for sharing your talent with us. How blessed we are to have you. Hugs and Love, Pat  ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. "Desiderata" [This message has been edited by regards2you (11-19-2002 01:16 AM).] |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Beautiful write Martie... We always get a glimpse of your heart when you share with us...and we all enjoy. |
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BloomingRose Member Elite
since 2000-08-09
Posts 3092Florida |
I wipe the music from my eyes ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ This line is a great start for a great poem. Very impressive! Deb |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
There is a definite Martiesque beauty wrapped around this one... Regards, Sudhir |
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Goodknight Member Elite
since 2002-06-15
Posts 2386Ohio, USA |
Martie - such deep feelings and longings you describe so deeply feel the yearning - your writing is so special and your caring is so deep - thanks - Paul |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
the music calls to me with words that fill the palace and fall out the open window into the cool-down sun and sometimes they are so big and sometimes so quiet that he needs to stand still long enough to hear Oh Martie, I read this last night and couldn't sign....had to walk away from the computer shaking my head in awe. Came back this morning to tell you that this write is just wonderful !! hugs, Chris "Hope" is the thing with feathers- |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
What has been said by so many others... you sweep our words away... |
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RSWells Member Elite
since 2001-06-17
Posts 2533 |
Love is miracle-gro. It's warmth and water and wind. Seen here. |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
These very thoughts to tug the hearts of long loves...the same issues to be solved, and said so well by you my friend. ThisDiamond |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
MartieSis~ Very, very pretty ... it just seems to gather the notes of a heart-song~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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