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Until You Told Me Everything
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Until You Told Me Everything |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(This is another song I wrote on the thoughts of my abused cousin Teia, when I was 11 years old and told my mom, “Where is she, is she coming out to play today at the amusement park?” and she cried and hugged me and told me she may never be the same again. I was too young to understand it all then but every year more of it comes to me and ever since then has saddened me as she has never been the same again, and I was always tubborn in believing it ever happened because she never deserved any of the pain!  This is the follow-up to Infrared, also about her, with the link below) /pip/Forum74/HTML/002190.html Until You Told Me Everything By: Noah Eaton 11/17/02 I shouldn’t have asked that morning I shouldn’t have heard anything I wished I stayed inside alone in my sandbox And pretended to wait for her to come through carefree I thought it was all just a simple joke I assumed it was nothing but a hoax Until you told me everything… Told me everything… That was the last time I ever walked into old Elitch’s Down a gray 44th street You held my hand under the gazebo Had our last ride on the ferris wheel where we used to feel her glee I thought it was all just a simple joke I assumed it was nothing but a hoax Until you told me everything… Told me everything… I don’t want to lose the pitch in this song I don’t want to feel the sinus pushing on I wanted to hear nothing at all is wrong Until you told me everything… The amusement park is now a graveyard With carousel horses still with broken hooves The Rainbow is lying pale in the rubble I know there’s nothing left to lose… …but still I wish it was all just a simple joke I assumed it was nothing but a hoax Until you told me everything… Told me everything… Until you told me everything… Told me everything… Until you told me everything… Told me everything… "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." Shakira [This message has been edited by Mistletoe Angel (11-18-2002 04:14 PM).] |
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Eliza Member
since 2002-11-18
Posts 58 |
Harm to children is the worst offense and it is disheartening that we find so many ways to do this, even when unintentional... Your heart is so large, Noah, that I hope one day, your cousin will find comfort in all you have had to say in her behalf |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
This is so sad, Noah... but you are so talented and I hope that this lovely song makes your cousin feel better  ~ hugs from deep in my heartLyra |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Though fairly young, I have unfortunately seen abuse and it's effects far too many times in my life. Any form of abuse is inexcusable especially against the young, the shadows and scars left upon those poor souls mar their beauty and light. However they have strength untold, and with support and acknowledgement like this poem and you're love for her she will find her way back and shine more brilliantly then ever. Touching work I'm sure she will appreciate. |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Oh goodness, Noah. This is so sad. I feel so bad for your cousin. When children are abused, they are never the same. My daughter was also abused when she was young. It has affected her very much. Now she has to go to counseling because of it. She was abused by someone I trusted to keep her while I had to work. "Love makes the world go around" |
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Cassie Junior Member
since 2002-11-12
Posts 32 |
Noah~ I am saddened for your cousin, I will keep her in my prayers. |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
Noah, once more your kind and tender soul shines through your poetry. Heartbreaking! |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Noah - two very sad writes I've seen from you. Just too sad... BC |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Things like this should never happen to one so young... difficult write sidekick! ~Hugs~ ~Love, like magic, depends on believing~ |
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scorpio Member Ascendant
since 2002-10-02
Posts 5178right...there |
Tough write for you, Noah...but you did well. ...believe what your heart feels... |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Noah, this is a very sad, yet touching write. All will be well with time. Chris "Hope" is the thing with feathers- |
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Paul Wilson
since 2002-07-07
Posts 4711United States |
Noah...Your words echo the pain suffered by so many. The innocence of childhood is so often destroyed by all types of sinceless abuse. My heart is heavy with tears from this sad poem...Paul |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Noah My heart hurts with yours.  |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Sad that life can hold many disappointments for us and those we love...James |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
oh God Noah  I sware, you have a way to make me so sad sometimes. Hugs to you. Please heal soon. |
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Kristine Member
since 2002-10-30
Posts 92Mahal Kita!!! |
this made me  but beautifully written. You are very talented. |
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