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Drexler_McStyles Member
since 2002-11-18
Posts 195Venice, Ca |
Behind tin shutters and star lit curtains melodies fill a vacancy left by the moonlight Behind closed doors and parked cars sweat is being brewed candles are fluttering nightgowns are being laid to rest Down south girls giggle atop a swing set about their chemical alterations and my voyeuristic inclinations while hobos howl at the moon Down here in the twilight of my youth I mock the world as it passes me by I see old men cry as beasts unearth that which they have hidden In the aftermath some years later long after now we will wonder aloud to ourselves how such a place or time was ever lost to us and have no reply beyond the years |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (sigh) Oh Drexler, this is marvelous, I just love how you describe each of the places in your words, and how the picture slowly fades to black like a gondola slowly slipping into the night of a canel! (big huggssssss) This is marvelous, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Drexler, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
hmmm...I was thinking Venice, La. But then, of course I would. This is excellent. I'm enjoying your work very much. |
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Lady In White
since 2001-02-12
Posts 2799USA |
And even before I read, I wondered, Venice, California where my feet once traipsed and where the sun still shines even on the dark side |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Some things never really change, do they? Enjoyed surfing Venice with you again. "Down here in the twilight of my youth I mock the world as it passes me by I see old men cry as beasts unearth that which they have hidden" |
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Drexler_McStyles Member
since 2002-11-18
Posts 195Venice, Ca |
Yeah Venice Beach, Ca. I forget we are a worlwide community here, though I didnt know there is a Venice, La. thanx for the commentary D. |
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GOlDsparklESS Member
since 2001-12-13
Posts 428central nj |
ahh.. you're a damn good poemer |
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Sandpiper Senior Member
since 2002-06-15
Posts 738land of flora and fauna |
Yes, we will--excellent!! "I am a sky where spirits live. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Excellent....very well done! ~Hugs~ ~Love, like magic, depends on believing~ |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Drexler Enjoyed this so much, being a so cal girl..but also because it is excellent poetry. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Enjoyed...James |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
I thought Venice Italy. Enjoyed this as I do your other work.  |
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