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SimplyGold Senior Member
since 2002-07-10
Posts 1453 |
The Unnoticed He sat in the corner a smile stretched across his face Arms lay limp on the arms of an old worn out sofa chair Through his lens were telling eyes seeing what no one seemed to notice The blue of his soul twinkled and he looked aged for his years From his lips came few words with yards of space between Measured words of experience with more expression than he cared to give Most took no notice of this soft spoken sage Some knew better and read more from the substance in between the black and white than from the sound that vibrated from his lips Only when he placed his pen upon the paper did I understand from where he came and only then did I realize what was inside He could not be swayed Lessons weathered from experience would only be shared with those he would choose... c2002SimplyGold [This message has been edited by SimplyGold (11-16-2002 11:59 PM).] |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
You have no idea how much I can personally relate to him... This is awesome, so descriptive...makes one feel as though they are there, looking into the eyes of one of so much... |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggsssssss) Sadly some wish not to share themselves unto others, even when we are willing to be friendly and faithful to them, and it takes so much courage to do so! (sigh) My heart goes out to all who keep the feelings lodged inside and hope somehow they can all find peace deep inside, sweet friend, I'm so happy you're back, I've missed you so, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Electra, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
'From his lips came few words with yards of space between Measured words of experience with more expression than he cared to give' A vivid picture you've written. I almost expect to turn around and see him sitting in the corner. |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Wow! This is really well written. I enjoyed this, thankyou. Chris  "Hope" is the thing with feathers- |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
This is a very good poem.....so well-written and such descriptive words. I, too, almost felt I could turn around and see him in the corner. Thanks for sharing with us. "Love makes the world go around" |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Excellent write...and good to see you again. ThisDiamond |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Only when he placed his pen upon the paper did I understand from where he came and only then did I realize what was inside He could not be swayed Lessons weathered from experience would only be shared with those he would choose... ==================================== and only a poet could understand... this is a wonderful write of imagery and wisdom... very well done SG.!! No one has ever shown me how to see the world the way I see it now ... |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
The blue of his soul twinkled and he looked aged for his years From his lips came few words with yards of space between Electra... this is sooooo good! I love the imagery and the word placement. Its amazing... in the short time you have been posting here, I have seen your poetry evolve immensely...  ~ hugs from the chipmunk down the streetkeep writing...please, you inspire me! Lyra |
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SimplyGold Senior Member
since 2002-07-10
Posts 1453 |
Magnus, thank you. Yes, I knew you would relate all too familiar   Noah, thanks for the welcome back and I share your sentiments. SG |
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SimplyGold Senior Member
since 2002-07-10
Posts 1453 |
Hi Duncan, Thanks for your feedback. I always look forward to hearing from everyone. I appreicate your comment. Simply Gold |
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SimplyGold Senior Member
since 2002-07-10
Posts 1453 |
Nightshade, Garysgirl, So glad to hear from you. Thank you for stopping in Your feedback means an alot to me.SG |
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SimplyGold Senior Member
since 2002-07-10
Posts 1453 |
This Diamond and Janet Marie, What a warm welcome back! Thank you both. I am really thrilled that you appreciated this as I'm a fan of you both. SimplyGold |
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SimplyGold Senior Member
since 2002-07-10
Posts 1453 |
Lyra, Thank you so much for this observation. I'm in such excellent company that erudition is inevitable. SimplyGold |
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