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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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There are sands of difference beneath the weight of step-- If one plods too heavily they just increase the depth. There is something that they know-- that we will never understand. A camel steps on foot--tip-toe and wind removes the veil of sand. Every night she takes the sky Luna makes the heavens sigh. She takes a gentle whispered grin-- the etch-a-sketch is new again... Bethel--that they built to Gods-- still stand--in spite of all the odds. Our towers were a churning steel: the rigs still pumping blood--surreal-- obscenity of an i.v.-- junkies' lust--reality-- penetrating earth like skin-- we all applaud and scream "again". And shoot our waste upon our walls-- We built the stilts. We measured fall. [This message has been edited by serenity blaze (11-16-2002 10:59 AM).] |
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jstewart Junior Member
since 2002-11-15
Posts 11 |
I love this peice, thank you for allowing me the chance to feast my eyes upon it. |
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jstewart Junior Member
since 2002-11-15
Posts 11 |
piece too! |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
j? and let's not forget: "peace"  |
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garysgirl  
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Karen, you really do amaze me with your abilities. You can write about so many subjects and in so many different styles. And you keep the attention of the reader in them all. Thanks for sharing with us. BTW you know the Bible, also, don't you? "Love makes the world go around" |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Ethel, she knows.... |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
I see your ~new~ little sister, Ethel and your big sister Karilea are here.... Taking good care of you, one way or another...how sweet... So cute.  You are an outstanding poet! Though I don't always reply, your poetry is remarkable, and I enjoy it a great deal, Serenity... Thanks. Warm Regards, Pat ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. "Desiderata" [This message has been edited by regards2you (11-16-2002 11:50 AM).] |
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Sandpiper Senior Member
since 2002-06-15
Posts 738land of flora and fauna |
Bravo!! "I am a sky where spirits live. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
We built the stilts. We measured fall. =============================== *smiling at you* .... smiling ... smiling .... smiling .... |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Sigh....yours is so much better than the one I wrote eons ago: ** Life is an Etch-a-Sketch It's all in what you make it Sometimes you have to Just pick up your life and shake it!!!!! [This message has been edited by Poet deVine (11-16-2002 12:51 PM).] |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
So many meanings here, Karen... and so very well written... I admire your work tremendously  ~ loving chipmunk hugsLyra |
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majnu
since 2002-10-13
Posts 1088SF Bay Area |
remarkably rich and varied. too much to comment on for me, i still have to think some more. -majnu |
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redheart angrybraids Member
since 2000-04-16
Posts 410honolulu, hawaii |
serenity some times you make me seap into a gradual world that i am at arms with do you know what i mean...x.,l [This message has been edited by redheart angrybraids (11-17-2002 03:23 AM).] |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
"We built the stilts, we measured fall" Hummmm you're just as poetically passionate as ever. Very nicely done all the way through..... |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
*hugging eric* How's the songwriting going, lovie? It's wonderful to "see" you again...thanks for popping in...  and thanks to all for reading (I'm going to try to get some more sleep--four hours last night!!!--a personal best record for this week) (and amelia? yes, I do understand...it happens when I write--sometimes I scare me )Thanks good forum...wish me luck in dreamtime? I am getting sleeeeeepy.... |
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Paul Wilson
since 2002-07-07
Posts 4711United States |
Karen~ The diversity of your poems always amaze me.I enjoy them so much. The changes in life we go through and what is real is like an etch-a-sketch of your mind...Paul |
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