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Mongoose (19,000TH POST)
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Mongoose (19,000TH POST) |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
Mongoose By: Noah Eaton 11/12/02 Underground the ubiquitous usurping urban sprawl Fiery fervent eyes focus under the fallow foxgloves Ivory fangs hidden behind a gruesome smile Throats cleared, can be heard in the courts Can the real Rikki-Tikki Tavi please stand up? Can the nightingale address the ministry? Objections become objectionate Sustained, then overuled when you're not even listening Who is the murderer? Who is the victim here? Is it the one playing these strings? Or the one writing these words as they appear? The spinning wheels reeling on your forehead Your words become a tuft of feathers Are they among the disassociate The disarticulate The disaggregate The disambigulate The spinning wheels reeling on your forehead What do you have to share? Where's the amnesty? Without it it's like shooting A mongoose The cobras on the loose We can't afford a truce Mongoose... Where are you? You make a sluice to run away Your hindsight is bungalowed You take Darzee's Chaunt to your flag ceremony Revising the whole metonymy from its trope Any lion is not dumb enough To memorize the thorn he steps his paw upon And the face of the one who takes it out But the splinters are all bedding these ruins Where Androcles is but a stranger Jailed away in the colliseum, hearing every blind mans tout Who is the murderer? Who is the victim here? Is it the one playing this guitar? Or the one writing these lyrics as they appear? The spinning wheels reeling on your forehead Your words become a tuft of feathers Could it be the tailors The caters. The prince or the pauper? The spinning wheels reeling on your forehead What do you have to share? Where's the amnesty? Without it it's like shooting A mongoose The cobras on the loose We can't afford a truce Mongoose... Where are you? Can't you see what's happening? We can't tell each other apart anymore It's time to clear our names Rid of hate and take account for our mistakes It's like playing a game of chess Without a king to take his claim Where's the amnesty? Without it it's like shooting A mongoose The cobras on the loose We can't afford a truce Mongoose... Where are you? We're murdering ourselves... We're murdering ourselves... Take these cobras away... Rikki-Tikki Tavi... If you still go by that name... "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." Shakira [This message has been edited by Mistletoe Angel (11-12-2002 04:14 PM).] |
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Suetang Member Ascendant
since 2001-03-07
Posts 5187Melbourne, Australia |
Hello Noah Congratulations on your 19,000th post, what a marvellous achievement. Your words spoke volumes, as they always do. Keep your head up and keep smiling my friend! Take care Love Sue I am in motion |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Such impressions remain branded in my mind...long after I read your art. ThisDiamond |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
 Noah my sweet sidekick! Your talent just grows and grows.. as do the numbers! Congratulations on your 19,000 Post!! Wonderful post to mark this milestone! ~Hugs, Smiles & Cheers, Nancy~ ~Let your heart guide you... It whispers so listen closely~ [This message has been edited by Enchantress (11-12-2002 04:22 PM).] |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
19,000! wow, i will never be as good as you.... Great poem too! "Sticks and stones will break my bones, |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Marvellous post Noah, but then yours always are. This line about said it all "The spinning wheels reeling on your forehead." You left spinning wheels reeling on my forehead. Congratulations on the 19,000th. I wish I had your command of words. Kethry Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Congratulations Noah...substantial...James |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
A wonderful poem to mark 19,000. I can't even imagine hoew much time and effotr that requires, which only prooves how great you contribution to Passions LOve you, dear Keep writing poems like this one! Liz |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Your reading shows, as does your insight, and your youthful wisdom. Congratulations, Noah! |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Wow! A powerful 19,000th post! What happens when you hit 20K? This looks to be about someone who has done someone wrong, yes? Cor |
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DawnG
since 2000-06-23
Posts 1494United States |
Noah, Congratulations on your 19,000 post. Great write my friend. Dawn |
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the_loner_23 Member Ascendant
since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479Jacksonville, Florida, USA |
Congrats on your 19000th post. I love the poem. Cold hands means a warm heart |
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Singing Sparrow Member
since 2002-05-12
Posts 94 |
one of your best yet, such angst and urgency fuels your every breath, way to go on yet another epic written in stone!  SS |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Absolutely fascinating read, the weaving of past and present and future "bewares" is marvelous! The playful rhyming and the rhythm is impeccable. Congrats on your 19000+ post, and the thing that makes it such a wondrous number...the bulk, a hug percentage of your posts are to respond to others with your heart. Now, I see it's apparently been 3 days since you posted one of your original poems, so are you feeling okay? I hope so! Whether on the shoal or on the shore, |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Hi Noah, this is wonderfuly insightful. You always amaze me wih the way you use words. Congrats on the number, you seem to pass a milestone every month. Luv, Sandra |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Underground the ubiquitous usurping urban sprawl Fiery fervent eyes focus under the fallow foxgloves ============================== Look at those groovy alliterations!! Clever write of theme Noah... your vocabulary always impresses me.... Congrats on yet another milestone...your dedication to poetry land is remarkable. Well done poet sir...well done No one has ever shown me how to see the world the way I see it now ... |
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scorpio Member Ascendant
since 2002-10-02
Posts 5178right...there |
Congrats, Noah...19,000 posts is an amazing feat from an amazing person!!! ...believe what your heart feels... |
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Stanley Climbfall Junior Member
since 2002-11-15
Posts 16 |
Brilliant! Young man, let us pray this mongoose can take the world by storm, I would be lying if I said your words aren't amazing and can replace hate with love! Outstanding young chap, good day to you laddy! Stanley Climbfall |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
congs on your 19,000th post keep writing |
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majnu
since 2002-10-13
Posts 1088SF Bay Area |
this is the best piece of yours that I have read. its damned amazing. what a way to end your last thousand. -majnu |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Amazing write Noah, and congratulations!! hugs to you, Chris "Hope" is the thing with feathers- |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Noah, It seems that you are doing this about every other week..... Keep up the good work...and thank you for all your poetry and kind words to others... |
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SimplyGold Senior Member
since 2002-07-10
Posts 1453 |
Congratulations, Mistletoe Angel I don't know how you do it, just keep doing it!  SG |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
Congratulations, Noah... This is an absolutely amazing piece of writing... You are brilliant!  ~ loving chipmunk hugsLyra |
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Krystopher Morris Member
since 2002-11-11
Posts 130Ancient land called Chivalry |
Dang 19,000. I dont even think ill be able to hit 1,000. GOOD JOB! Poetry is love and love is life. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
WOW! Congrats! Noah........that's a lot of posts......this is beautiful work as always! |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Now, Noah, how in the world did I miss this one? And, it's a very big milestone, too.I look for your poems. (Oh, I just noticed that you posted it on one of the days I was gone to visit Gary the last time....BTW, we're going to be together again this coming weekend, we hope and pray). As I do all of your poems, I loved this one, too, sweet Noah. CONGRATULATIONS ON YOUR 19,000th post. that's really something...and not even two years, yet. I truly enjoy everyone of your poems and your replies to others. You are a very important part of this wonderful Passions In Poetry. Thanks for sharing your heart, Noah. We all love you here. "Love makes the world go around" ~~with love and hugs from Ethel~~ [This message has been edited by garysgirl (11-17-2002 09:05 AM).] |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Congratulations, Noah...how blessed this group is to have you. Your love and kind words, especially to new poets, a little timid and unsure of themselves, I'm sure, helps bridge that gap causing them to feel like they are included and welcome, and that what they have to say, in their own way, ~is~ valuable. And, you do it like no other....Such a loving, kind heart you have. This poem is awesome! How talented you are. God Bless You for your loving ways, Hugs to you and warm regards, Pat ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Congratulations, Noah! You are awesome! |
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Auguste
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
Noah, your writing has come such a long way. Congratulations on your 19,000th post, my friend. The stars will shine when I am gone, |
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