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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn 
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No, I don’t play at this Never have And my intentions The truth of me Lies within, Every letter Every poem Every word That I’ve written No, I don’t play a game It’s just too damned Hard To keep up with Ever-changing rules Too damned Difficult To stay in bounds No, All I’ve let you see Is me |
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Ceinwyn Member Elite
since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175VA |
There's no mouth wide open smiley...*sigh* Uh oh!? I do hope this isn't one of those personal experience poems..if it is I'm still here if you want to talk.. If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried. |
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Radrook Senior Member
since 2002-08-09
Posts 648 |
Very effective dramatic monologue. Enjoyed! God bless! |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
funny thing is m'yeti...people can TRY to hide in this thing--and it's always so revealing when they do... shrug. c'est la vie. I related to your words right away because you ARE you. And I figure being ourselves is the only job we are perfect for any way... I'm so tired...yawn...not making much sense, but why break a trend?  Now if I can only figure out which one of "the voices" is actually ME!  Hugs you wonderful poetry writing yeti. |
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kruser Junior Member
since 2002-11-08
Posts 11 |
nice writing, i really liked these lines: It’s just too damned Hard To keep up with Ever-changing rules good work! |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
Hey...this is stronger'n acre of garlic!....you have this really twisted way about bringing out the worst in human nature....LOL.....I think that's why I like your work so much......???? [This message has been edited by Toerag (11-08-2002 07:56 AM).] |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
wranx Than chaos reigns, enjoyed. |
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garysgirl  
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Ed, I always love to read your poetry because the real you always shines through. "Love makes the world go around" |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Very honest and open write. Much enjoyed the read. ~Hugs~ ~I've loved you forever, in lifetimes before.~ |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
No? (smiling) in truth we all hide something of ourselves and all play games of sorts.... (laughing) Love the words Ed... very well done. |
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Connel
since 2002-11-04
Posts 736Florida, USA |
Beutiful poem, i enhoyed the read very much.. Thank you for sharing. I wish to become a great poet some day, but it will only come in time. Til then, I shall write my poems, and wait. |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Wranx, From beginning to end, this poem just shouted ~honesty~ to me. The replies are interesting. With the message ~I am hearing~, I hope this is the true you. It is admirable! It is true all of life is a game, but, part of the game is growing and learning. Becoming better than we were, and changing into all we are meant to be. Before we die, I hope! In any case, I enjoyed this poem a great deal. With warm regards, Pat  ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. "Desiderata" [This message has been edited by regards2you (11-08-2002 11:21 AM).] |
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brian sites Senior Member
since 2002-06-25
Posts 1475usa |
frustration's ring The Wisdom of Joe can apply in more than just the physical sense--- a nose needn't be flattened but...you know this was raw |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
Yes, I don't play that game either..what you see is what you get...like it or not your words probably will hit a chord within many..and of those many, most will believe like I do, that we are not playing a game..but the truth is..... M |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
I like the measured calm (and need) in this. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Yes. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
'Too damned Difficult To stay in bounds' Exactly. I don't always color within the lines anyway. |
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