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Silent Plea
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Silent Plea |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989
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I listened in the silence as she whispered her plea "Dearest Lord above, could you please help me?" I could hear it slowly growing the desperation in her voice, she felt abandoned and alone, like she had been left no choice. In her eyes I could see the torment and I could feel each ounce of pain her tears began flowing down, like the gentle sprinkling of rain. In her soul there was a struggle, it was residing deep within, once, just once, she wished that she could somehow win. She sat mesmerized in silence, as her eyes searched into mine, I offered my words of comfort, to help ease her weary mind. There was a briefness in her pause before she slowly began to speak, and with her next words spoken I could feel my heart grow weak. I couldn't stop my tears from falling touching me so deeply that I began to cry "I hope that God let's me know love, just once before I die." {revised 11-07-02} If I have touched one heart through my words, then I have acheived my dream... {On wings of words our spirits fly~ and our souls are free. ~me} [This message has been edited by Gentle Spirit (11-07-2002 01:05 PM).] |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
High impact in your own gentle way. ThisDiamond |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggssssss) Oh Donna, this is so very sad and heartfelt, sweet friend, I know this ever so well as when I was a little boy, I always wanted to make peace with everyone but immature boys abused me and I cried out if I would ever be loved in my life! (sad sigh) Now I am, for Joanna and you and all my friends have shown me the beauty of love and I am now confident all can find that love if they believe in it and believe in Him! (sigh) God Bless You, sweet friend, I send angel hugs her way, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Donna, thank you for sharing!  May love and light alwyas shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
rhymes divine Donna... achingly beautiful..tenderly composed... once again you do your pen name justice. heart-hugs, jm No one has ever shown me how to see the world the way I see it now ... |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
This Diamond, thank you. Impact is what I was going for when I wrote it. Hugs. Noah, it's ok hon, this one is just an imaginary one based on a conversation I had with a friend a long time ago. Your heart is so sweet. Hugs |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
JM, you snuck in there on me. As always, I appreciate your time and comments. HUGS YOU |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Oh, sweet Donna, you have really touched me with this compassionate poem. It made me feel so sorry for the one in the poem. And also made me so thankful to have known "love", myself....not only now with Gary, but before with my husband who passed away before I met Gary. thanks for making me remember that I have so much to be thankful for, even when I'm feeling blue and downhearted. This verse should make reader think.... "I hope that God lets me know love, just once before I die." Love makes the world go 'round (unkown) |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Ethel, you humble me with your words. Thank you. Hugs. |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Strong and sad, Donna. Hugs Sandra |
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Connel
since 2002-11-04
Posts 736Florida, USA |
Beautiful poem.. I will keep an eye out for more of your lovely poetry. I wish to become a great poet some day, but it will only come in time. Til then, I shall write my poems, and wait. |
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NewEnglandlazurlu Member Rara Avis
since 2002-01-04
Posts 7470A Mountain Paradise |
Donna, how sad I am for the person in your poem. To go through life feeling there will never be love is just awful. This is one mighty powerful and emotional piece of writing. Hugs, Marti |
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Robert Adamson Member
since 2002-10-21
Posts 328PA/USA |
I felt a part of the poem in that I heard the ending tears and comfort. Thank you. etoodog |
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Auguste
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
A very unexpected and heart-tugging ending, Donna. Like all of your poetry, nicely written, my friend.  *hugs*The stars will shine when I am gone, |
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*Stubby* Member
since 2002-09-19
Posts 122 |
May the Great Sprit always be there to guide you Beautiful J ...*S*... |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Wonderful Donna...tugs at the heartstrings. ~Hugs~ ~I've loved you forever, in lifetimes before.~ |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Just popping in quick to say hi and thanks to all for leaving your thoughts. Hugs to poetry land. |
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