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Shadows of the Sage
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Shadows of the Sage |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla 
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Shadows of the Sage I walked in shadows of the sage I read the fruits of human age I felt the Braille of species mind Yet still I grope a sense of blind. I’ve tried to edit forever’s yield Within the loop of natures field And felt the dust of change per-se Yet still am held in night’s dismay. There is no scale to weight the dust No scale to hold the counter thrust. No pole to hold the cross of bar We’ll never know just who we are. Forgive this child of natures need This seed of question of its deed I’m sure it is the scheme of things No matter what the future brings Perhaps the stars will show the way Humanity perhaps will stay. Perhaps there is a plan of rhyme Perhaps we’ll see the end of time’ But soon I’ll lay me down to sleep And there will wait the change of reap. |
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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
As the sleeper meets the reaper The questions all come to naught, As the keeper takes the sleeper The answers all are then brought Gloom |
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ccvulture Junior Member
since 2002-11-06
Posts 16 |
Hmm, not bad, not bad. Compact and neat, although some of the rhyme could be more imaginative and some is a bit contorted. I like the autumnal flavour. CCV |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (smiles) I love the natural twist of this, sweet friend, I am sure we will find reasons along the way and the stars and grain yield great significance of its own to guide us! (sigh) This is excellent, sweet friend, I love it, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Seymour, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Professor Gloom Good retort, thank you. ccvulture Good critic, enjoyed your comments. Noah, Thank you my friend. [This message has been edited by Seymour Tabin (11-07-2002 02:00 PM).] |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Have I told you lately what a joy it is to wake up to your words? Well it sure is Sy love.. Much enjoyed this morning's read. ~Morning hugs~ ~I've loved you forever, in lifetimes before.~ |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Seymour~ 'But soon I’ll lay me down to sleep And there will wait the change of reap.' Kind sir ... you never shortchange the reader~ I am so happy that you are a poet ... my pleasure always to read your thoughts~ *Huglets*  ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Lady In White
since 2001-02-12
Posts 2799USA |
quote: Friend Sun printed "The Golden Key" a poem of wise, written by thee I think this one might tip the scale for once again, you've slipped the veil |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Enjoyed the read, muchly, I loved this stanza best, too, as LW did: There is no scale to weight the dust No scale to hold the counter thrust. No pole to hold the cross of bar We’ll never know just who we are. A great read for early in the morning. Whether on the shoal or on the shore, |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
As always excellent, with a prophetic feel to this piece. Liked the comments you received too. Smiles all the way. ThisDiamond |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I've tried to edit forever's yield Within the loop of natures field And felt the dust of change per-se Yet still am held in night’s dismay. There is no scale to weight the dust No scale to hold the counter thrust. No pole to hold the cross of bar We’ll never know just who we are. Forgive this child of natures need This seed of question of its deed I'm sure it is the scheme of things No matter what the future brings ======================================== Look at you working this theme to poetic perfection...so many clever analogies, word play and wise man lines wrapped in rhyme divine...I do so love the way your mind works.... I felt the Braille of species mind Yet still I grope a sense of blind. If YOU are blind...then the rest of us have been walking into walls for years  You blind? NOPE...and we see what we missed when we see thru your eyes of wise. now use those pools of wisdom to give me a winkie or two *L* *winkiewinkie  No one has ever shown me how to see the world the way I see it now ... |
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Neeraja Senior Member
since 2002-06-22
Posts 812The Netherlands |
I enjoyed this poem a lot!!! Beautiful lines!!! Neeraja |
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Connel
since 2002-11-04
Posts 736Florida, USA |
I really enjoyed that poem.. Ill keep an eye out for your newer poetry.. I wish to become a great poet some day, but it will only come in time. Til then, I shall write my poems, and wait. |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Sy, if you never do another good thing in your life, I'm telling you it is okay!  ~ for your poetry writing and the gift of it to us, and the pleasure and the knowledge and the wisdom we receive, should forever and ever, put you in good stead ~ And, how you manage to do this on a daily basis is something to ponder. Enjoyed this most perfect poem a great deal. And, am constantly learning from your poetry. Thank you, Warm Regards, Pat ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Sy You are very special! |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Sy~ Nobody writes 'em like you, my friend...nobody. I enjoyed this very much. Hugs, ~Vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Enchantress Afternoon hugs back. Marge,always a pleasure to read your comments. Lady In White Thank you dear lady. VAS A joy to read your reply. ThisDiamond Thank you for the smiles. JM, You are my winkiewinkie twinky And I'm your Randy Stinky. And we will have some raspberry tea If Randy will but fly me. Neeraja Thank you for the beautiful. Connel Thank you so much. Pat, Flattery will get you everywhere. LOL Thank you dear. Martie As you are to me. Vicky, Thank you so much. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I went and found some more winkies for you... it just seemed the thing to do. Now look close into my eyes... there you will see the butterflies. Oh yes ... I know they are found there... 'twas you who painted them there with care.    and one for Randy too *L*  |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
JM You will always be my butterfly. A butterfly of my phantom eye. You will always ride my Randy's back For you have the magic and the knack. WWRS  |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Seymour darling heart bumpity bump up you go Bev de bump came out today I thought she had gone away But she still comes out when I call And so I said raise this one tall A poem that is so superb In every sentence every word Let others read of this victory Of sense and sensibility YOU beloved heart can Write The words that clarify the night Too often a thought isn’t spared And then the voice is unheard But you, who write with humanity You fill the sight of such as me So Bev de bump just do the deed And send it back to the top at speed You know I love it utterly utterly utterly because you are a wonderful writer and your eyes are pools of wisdom xxxx As always Mushy  Breathe through the heat of our desire |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Marsha, Well I guess the bumpity bump didn't do much. But I do thank you for the delightful poem and the kind words. You are a dear. So hello to your beautiful daughter and stay well. Sy |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Marsha, Well I guess the bumpity bump didn't do much. But I do thank you for the delightful poem and the kind words. You are a dear. So hello to your beautiful daughter and stay well. Sy |
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