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Cross the Line
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Cross the Line |
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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
Cross the line Going from parts to new parts, From sunshine Brightness blind, Going to day of new starts. You can feel In the steel Rolling box transportation Moves it makes The slight shakes Rattle roads with vibration, Then it brakes Crossing to destination. Gloom [This message has been edited by Professor Gloom (10-14-2002 09:45 AM).] |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Life can be like a train ride, but as the chief engineer, we have the choice of which tracks we wish to follow. This is another fine example of your intriguing ponderances. ~ May the tracks you travel be safe, smooth, and take you where you want to go in life ~ EA |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
You've got the most interesting perspective prof--I could feel the rhythm of track in the rhythm of word here. You continue to paint mind paintings.  |
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the_loner_23 Member Ascendant
since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479Jacksonville, Florida, USA |
Awesome write Cold hands means a warm heart |
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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
Thank you, Earth Angel, serenity blaze, & the_loner_23, For your kind words I am glad you found some worth in my words. Gloom |
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DawnG 
since 2000-06-23
Posts 1494United States |
Very thought provoking poem. Dawn |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
between the railroad down below and the tractor trailers in route I feel that shaking vibrating all night long... M |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
gawd I love your style! |
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