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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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talk to me in whispers of these velvet mazes grown a path of dread where others led-- too many on the path I've known. talk to me in whimper I'll feel the velvet of atone-- red cloth in a blanket swept scratching tears in velvet---wept. I want to play the blues in type I want to wang a string in sing... yearning for myself--realized-- without the taut of string--released... take this finger from my strength-- stay my hand--strum silence. let my lip follow each note like a latin lover's stroke... lick of lips and bite beneath--- give me oh the soft struck heat... strike the hand and keep the time--- RUMBA! of a snake entwined-- take me HOME-- make me mine... My god...My god a woman sings--- My goddess--yesssss.... the serpent stings... [This message has been edited by serenity blaze (11-04-2002 07:26 AM).] |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
talk to me in whispers of these velvet mazes grown a path of dread where others led-- too many on the path I've known. talk to me in whimper I'll feel the velvet of atone-- red cloth in a blanket swept scratching tears in velvet---wept. I want to play the blues in type I want to wang a string in sing... yearning for myself--realized-- without the taut of string--released... ==================================== what you just did there....with the velvet imagery and metaphor and the rhymes you wrapped it in-- is just pure, unadulterated poetry.... sometimes i wonder if you even realize... you rock baby.......   |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
"I want to play the blues in type I want to wang a string in sing... yearning for myself--realized-- without the taut of string--released..." IWIHWT! I'm keeping this one with my favorite witchtunes. |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
"My god...My god a woman sings--- My goddess--yesssss.... the serpent stings..."  Yay!!! Wow, oh my gosh, I just love this, sweet friend, rock on! (kiss on cheek) I could almost hear the latin blues reading this and maracas sounding like the serpents rattle, sweet friend, I LOVE IT, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Karen, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
smiling...Noah? I wrote this to Santana...you heard every bit and for that? I'm so grateful! m'baby Jan? You rock with me...oh Yeah... AND m'nancy...so sweet with your harmony? now...if I could only grow some maracas?  [This message has been edited by serenity blaze (11-04-2002 02:59 PM).] |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Serenity~ This just ROCKS ... I could feel the rhythm in the rhyme~ Awesome gal~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Karen It's hard to always say the right thing...a poem is such a piece of personal heart...this one just felt like a piece of mine too...hope you don't mind sharing it with me.  |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
"Make me mine." "Goddess yes, the serpent stings." *kerslumpf* |
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