Open Poetry #23 |
Being Free ( Feedback Please! ) |
Connel
since 2002-11-04
Posts 736Florida, USA |
I live in this cage, I eat and drink. I'm trapped in this prison, no way to escape. I sit here waiting, for a chance to get away. But no one ever, leaves me the chance But one day, the door swung open. And a young boy screamed, "Go on! Be free!" So I ran, as fast as I could. I flapped my wings, and began to fly. I flew high, high and free. Looking down, down at the ground. I seen the boy, smiling. And to this day, I still fly free. |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Connel, this has potential and a real seize the day feel about it. Welcome to Passions., I hope you find a home here. Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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Walter Poe Senior Member
since 1999-10-13
Posts 787 |
under it all is hope write what is inside it makes it easier to connect to people. Take a good look at my face |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(smiles) Yes, fly free and let the spirit of the boy always carry you with love and laughter! This is a wonderful debut, sweet friend, I LOVE IT!!! Welcome to Passions, sweet Chris, may you be inspired by all of us here as we will all be inspired by your lovely words! I can't wait to read more of your lovely words, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Chris, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Welcome to Passions Chris! I'm sure you're going to love it here! Please check your email for a special greeting. ~Hugs & Smiles, Nancy~ ~Love, like magic, depends on believing.~ |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Connel Welcome and enjoyed your post. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Welcome to Passions. Keep flying high, free of all cages. |
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scorpio Member Ascendant
since 2002-10-02
Posts 5178right...there |
...believe what your heart feels... [This message has been edited by Enchantress (11-04-2002 09:16 AM).] |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Welcome to Passions! Karilea |
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Connel
since 2002-11-04
Posts 736Florida, USA |
Im very glad you guys liked my poem... Considering its my first... but it wasnt hard, all i had to do was get a reason... I have a bird, and it used to be in a very small cage, but i mved it to a very bigger one.. and that gave me the idea to write about freedom.... Thanks for the comments!.. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
yes, seize the moment! Positive write! |
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