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Orchards of Quiet Moon
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Orchards of Quiet Moon |
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Greeneyes  
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind 
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Paint the sky with petals of a thousand flowers trace the star-cast shadows that I could breathe again upon earth: I fell into darkness into your amber midnights your naked hope laying beside me Whispers fell upon curves of the moon soft yields in silence echoing how winter feels when snow falls gentle dancers touching the world of my eyes {you loved winter, the ice storms} I sometimes failed to cross the silent borders of your thoughts I, the lover, counting anxious hours of loss-- veiled light, bronze colors glitter of unnamed stars moving my lips skyward {I am where I need to be} an angel between worlds in endless water pool of tender blue how my dreams arrive: I fell for hours splashing into stars Deep inside the stillness ........I can hear you speak You're still an inspiration ........To me [This message has been edited by Greeneyes (11-03-2002 08:10 PM).] |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
And so glad we are that our favorite star shines brightly upon us with gems such as this....thank you, Lauren......  Pen how you truly feel... |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
"Paint the sky with petals with a thousand flowers"... "I fell for hours splashing into stars".... --just a few of the lines that captivated me. ~Impressive poetic expression. EA |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Lauren - your words are ethereal. So delicate, soft...always as though one were within a dreamscape... Nicely done.. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Incredibly beautiful Lauren.. Your words ever so gently caress the page.. dancing down to splash into the stars that I never want to end. You continue to grow and astound me with your creative writing ability. ~Hugs sweet poetess~ ~Love, like magic, depends on believing.~ |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
It read so smooth and tenderly, Lauren... lovely thoughts to store in mind M |
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NewEnglandlazurlu Member Rara Avis
since 2002-01-04
Posts 7470A Mountain Paradise |
Oh Lauren, I just loved this. Beautifully written. Hugs, Marti Life is not measured by the number of breaths we take, but by the moments that take our breath away. |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Wow! My friend...the BEST of your best...without par...even with the 4th read... jwesley |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Goodness.....this is beautiful....... amazing poetry. Thanks for sharing with us. Love makes the world go 'round (unkown) |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 Yay!!! Awwwwwwwww, I just love this, sweet friend, this is a gorgeous vision and had me imagining swimming in the stars! (kiss on cheek) This is gorgeous, sweet friend, I love it, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Lauren, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Greeneyes - all things I've said about your writings I say once more over again... BC |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
OMG........ THIS is the reason for poetry....THIS is the way one is supposed to feel after reading a poem...breathless..starstruck...sated.... You write such amazing images...such poetically PERFECT verses.... "Paint the sky with petals of a thousand flowers trace the star-cast shadows that I could breathe again upon the earth: I fell into darkness into your amber midnights your naked hope laying beside me whispers fell upon curves of the moon soft yield of silence echoing how winter feels when snow falls gentle dancers touching the world of my eyes ============================ the lover, counting anxious hours of loss-- veiled light, bronze colors glitter of unnamed stars moving my lips skywards {I am where I need to be} an angel between worlds in endless water pool of tender blue how my dreams arrive: I fell for hours splashing into stars ============================ I wanted this to go on forever....  Unknown to us, there are moments when crevices open for time to come alive with begining. |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
incredible takes my breath away  "two hearts will build the foundation for one point of light |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I tried. I tried to find a favorite line...but one led to the other... smiling here! |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
{I am where I need to be} an angel between worlds in endless water pool of tender blue There is comfort in simply being who we are~ (like it or lump it I say) and as always Dear Lauren I take comfort in your gentle words of knowing. hugging you~ |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
Sunnyone~ thank you for stopping by, I appreciate your words....so good to see you ~~ Earth Angel~ I appreciate your comments much, thank you... ~~ Magnus~ thank you always for your soft replies.... ~~ Enchantress~ you are with a doubt a constant smile to these pages..... I so appreciate your friendship....thank you sweet lady...hugssss ~~ nakdthoughts~ thank you ~M~ I appreciate your words... ~~ NewEnglandlazurlu~ thank you for letting me know you enjoyed.....hugssssss ~~ jwesley~ thanks my friend.....~~ garysgirl~ thank you sweet lady for sharing your comment with me.... ~~ Mistletoe Angel~ Hi...you....I always appreciate the smile I get when I read your replies.... hon....~~ Bill Charles~ hugsssss and over again, thank you ~~ Janet Marie~ butterfly sister of my heart..... you flatter me always...thank you hugssssss and thank youfor being a shoulder of support...... ~~ Temptress~ HI sweet friend.....I appreciate you taking itme to read, and leave your heart notes....hugsssss ~~~~~~~~  Deep inside the stillness |
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Moonlight Romeo
since 2001-09-10
Posts 982The heart of you |
I still need to find the feather that you write with, for I find that no pen of heart or mind could write such breaths. Thank you. What light through yon window breaks? It is the east, and Juliet is the sun. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Paint the sky with petals of a thousand flowers trace the star-cast shadows that I could breathe again upon earth: I fell into darkness into your amber midnights your naked hope laying beside me Whispers fell upon curves of the moon soft yields in silence =================================== came by to inhale the pure beauty of you again....I wonder if you even realize just how beautiful this is........ *sigh*  |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
{I am where I need to be} an angel between worlds in endless water pool of tender blue how my dreams arrive: I fell for hours splashing into stars Lady Lauren, you are an angel, with a heart of gold. Your words touch......always...... Luv you. If I have touched one heart through my words, then I have acheived my dream... |
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Opeth Senior Member
since 2001-12-13
Posts 1543The Ravines |
Your writings have the poetic style of a writer of whom I admire very much, the only difference is that yours is the antithesis in subject matter. Enjoyed. |
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sigheyes Member
since 2001-04-25
Posts 323the winds of destiny |
sigh~ so beautiful. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Lauren, A bouquet of symbols that captured my heart. |
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Suetang Member Ascendant
since 2001-03-07
Posts 5187Melbourne, Australia |
Hello Lauren Your words were simply stunning and the images portrayed through your words were amazing. I hope all is well with you. Take care......Sue I am in motion |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
Thank you for taking your time to come by...I appreciate all he comments, and though I havent had the time I need lately to come in and read and enjoy....I keep this family close to heart....love to all.... Lauren~ Deep inside the stillness |
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Connel
since 2002-11-04
Posts 736Florida, USA |
Nice Poem., Thanks for sharing.. Enjoyed the read. I wish to become a great poet some day, but it will only come in time. Til then, I shall write my poems, and wait. |
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sigheyes Member
since 2001-04-25
Posts 323the winds of destiny |
I am so glad that this came back to the top. I think it is lovely. |
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dougsbird21 Member
since 2002-11-08
Posts 52London(from TX though) |
Keep up the good work with structure..poems written in plain lines without spaces,lack of weird punctuation and odd capitalizations are boring.....step over the line and you'll succeed! "Write what you feel, not what u think you should feel." |
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JAR Junior Member
since 2001-11-06
Posts 34 |
LittlL'' how dreams arrive J' |
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Salty Senior Member
since 2002-11-23
Posts 669Texas |
I came looking for you, and I'm sure glad I did. After seeing your post on my writing I wanted to see your work again. It's been awhile since I've read you, and I must say you have such a great talent for this. A most unique visual appears with your every word. "Excellent" Salty |
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BloomingRose Member Elite
since 2000-08-09
Posts 3092Florida |
I fell for hours splashing into stars ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ There is so much beauty in this poem I hardly know which line is best. It's all so very beautiful, in words and imagery. Deb |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Beautifully written...James |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Like Janet said, I wished this went on forever.... wonderfully captivating writing... muchly enjoyed... regards, sudhir |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
I have been blessed to read much fine poetry today, and this is certainly amongst those offerings! I don't know where I'm running now, I'm just running on ~ Jackson Browne |
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Daniel J D Senior Member
since 2000-10-01
Posts 1471Hillcrest, Queensland, Australia |
I am moonstruck and in awe. Respond to my call and let the waves of my heart fill your life with the wonders of love |
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Miah Senior Member
since 2002-08-26
Posts 1062Pennsylvania |
Brava!! this was absolutly beautiful!! |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoy your read |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
I loved that lauren. The images were amaizing, I didn't want it to end. Never be normal! |
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ctowen Member Elite
since 2001-10-18
Posts 2286Green Mountains of VT |
I have lost track of the countless reads upon these words .... as many as the stars I have dreamt of waking to ... such bright smiles, warm and loving thoughts fill your painted stars. Sometimes we forget to simply smell the flowers but worse, stand back and see the garden. I am captured under your green thumb, greeneyes.  |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Miss you butterfly sister of mine Happy Thanksgiving girlie I bet this one is extra special |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
quote:and i've wondered why i like reading you so much...  peace 'n hugs lady. |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
My goodness Lauren, this is beautiful!! Library bound it is. I always enjoy your writings as they never cease to make me drift off in wonder... hugs, Chris "Hope" is the thing with feathers- that perches in the soul.... -Emily Dickinson [This message has been edited by Nightshade (11-28-2002 09:45 PM).] |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
Wow, I am so touched by the responses.....thank you all so much for taking your time to read, and leave you heart notes.....love to all....HUGSSSSSS and muwwwaaahhhssssssss Lauren~ Deep inside the stillness |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Sad, still and refreshing. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
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