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Magnus
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0 posted 2002-11-01 08:49 PM


A canopy fell, covering the horrors
of man’s desire for freedom...
White, mingling with crimson,
crimson with blue, with gray..

The sounds of cannon stilled...
Only the ringing, incessant ringing
now plaguing the mind’s ear...
That....and the screams...

Thousands lying in still slumber,
no longer bleeding life, no moans
in anguish, tears now frozen
in captured starkness..

Distant campfires lighting the horizon
as glowing orange in the backdrop
remind one of the siege, the burning
of countless homes, history removing
history....yet, soon to be again built...

Freedom will drive the nails into
hardest oak, most smooth of pines..
Sap still seeping, needles fresh
on the ground...

Brothers standing, sipping a once
fresh cup of coffee...Now cold,
almost frozen...not even noticed.
For numbness has taken away
the daydreams, the feelings, the
hope...replaced by...

By the screams, now silent, yet
heard...Countless nights they
shall linger within a tormented
mind....waking to tears...
waking to the cries for mothers..
for fathers...for a brother or
sister lost in a senseless war...

O but the price of freedom,
ever great the burden of war.
As mothers cry, as children die,
as man, selfish man....snatches
one’s essence from the soil
of life, waiting the next planted
seed to grow...that the scythe
might again cut the wheat from
the chaff of life....

To be crushed,sifted, ground,
to the fine powdery consistency
of dust....Ashes to ashes,dust
to dust....


© Copyright 2002 Barry J. Tackett - All Rights Reserved
Marsha
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1 posted 2002-11-01 09:01 PM


Magnus darling heart, when you write like this my heart hears the sounds so clearly my soul feels the ripping apart of lives and souls. There is within your writing an indefinable something that lifts it always out of the ordinary and mundane your writing could never be described that way. When you write I’m transported in time and space to the time the instant the scene plays on my minds eye and I feel the whole experience. You have so much talent darling heart, and when you spill it onto these pages I’m astounded by the power of your words. Truly I love this utterly utterly utterly but you knew that didn’t you darling man, of course, your writing never fails to grace my library. I love it


Love and warm stuff
as always
Mushy




Breathe through the heat of our desire
Thy coolness and they balm
Let sense be dumb let flesh retire
Speak through the earthquake wind and fire

[This message has been edited by Marsha (11-01-2002 09:02 PM).]

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2 posted 2002-11-01 09:03 PM


"waking to tears...
waking to the cries for mothers..
for fathers...for a brother or
sister lost in a senseless war"

We have all been woken up too many times.
Thank you, Magnus.
Senseless war.

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3 posted 2002-11-01 09:09 PM


O but the price of freedom,
ever great the burden of war.
As mothers cry, as children die,
as man, selfish man....snatches
one's essence from the soil
of life, waiting the next planted
seed to grow...that the scythe
might again cut the wheat from
the chaff of life....


To be crushed,sifted, ground,
to the fine powdery consistency
of dust....Ashes to ashes,dust
to dust....
=======================
superb use of metaphor and analogy...
also striking imagery...powerful write Barry....and may I add a belated congrats on your 7000th...the moth is behind in poetry land these days.
Well done poet sir.

jm

Unknown to us, there are moments when crevices open for time to come alive with begining.

John O'Donohue
Conamara Blues

garysgirl
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4 posted 2002-11-01 09:16 PM


Barry......absolutely amazing is your talent,
kind Sir. All your poetry is  beautiful.
Thanks so much for sharing your work.


Love To All,
Ethel

Magnus
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5 posted 2002-11-01 09:24 PM


Mushy dear,  thanx darling girl for all of
your warm accolades....you always brighten
my night with your heart's words...


Midnitesun...yes,  senseless war...isn't
all war senseless...and there are no
winners....only those that lose less...

JM...WOW....not often I get your praise,
though I dearly love it always...thanx..
Just got in the zone for a little while
and felt the words...had to share...

Ethel,  flatter me more!!!  Thanx dear
poetess..you always have been kind to me
with your thoughts...

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6 posted 2002-11-01 11:53 PM




(tears fall down my cheeks) Oh Barry, you speak with the knowledge of history and philosophy so well here, sweet friend, it seems the seeds continue to be spread like those of dandelions and only can we pray for our next brothers and sisters who run the world we pass on in legacy! (big huggssssss) This is very well-said, sweet friend, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Barry, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

ThisDiamond
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7 posted 2002-11-02 12:02 PM


A vivid and powerful piece...shivered with the images that cannot be silenced.
Well done. ThisDiamond

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8 posted 2002-11-02 12:04 PM


Powerful writing, Barry. Many poems have been written about the Civil War...this is one of the best
CSKpoet
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9 posted 2002-11-02 04:30 AM


I would have to agree with all above, Barry!
An astonishing awesome write...you amaze me!
hugs, Cher

Poetry is:
Passion, imagination and intellect running together.

Aloha with warmest regards, Cheryl Stewart Koomoa

Ivy Rose
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10 posted 2002-11-02 12:45 PM


This was an amazing write, Barry.  Made even more tangible to me because my son is in the Army and could be called to action in these uncertain times.  WONDERFULLY EXPRESSIVE POEM!!!  ***Ivy Rose
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11 posted 2002-11-02 01:09 PM



This is a remarkable poem on the American Civil War (n'est-ce pas?--is it not?). There are so many intriguing aspects to both you and your poetry.

~ I doff my halo to you, dear Poet!

EA

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12 posted 2002-11-02 01:11 PM


Barry - I have read much and visited many Civil War battlefields. It's amazing of the slaughter that happened back then. Hallowed places I have walked upon...

BC

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13 posted 2002-11-02 01:19 PM


Magnus this is a absolutely amazing piece of work...I am in awe...and I will read this one over and over...for this is beautiful and brought tears to my eyes.... and I have such a craving for beautiful words that this poem I will read many times. Enjoyed so much.

You are a very talented soul.

DeaDiAmore

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14 posted 2002-11-20 02:19 PM


The sounds of cannon stilled...
Only the ringing, incessant ringing
now plaguing the mind’s ear...
That....and the screams...

~*~

and the weary
walking homeward bound
carry in their heart
the silent cannon sound...

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