Open Poetry #23 |
Harlem |
Master Senior Member
since 1999-08-18
Posts 1867Boston, MA |
The storm is upon us. The tower of Babel is plummeting down. Each crack in the sidewalk hears thunder through silence. Insomnia’s eyelids are opened like coffins. I’m sipping my coffee. The winds off the rooftops resound like organs. This orchestra’s rage sweeps the notes off the page. I’m scared and I’m silent. I’m biting my nails -- The nails that hammered my arms to the cross. My blood slowly fills the potholes of Harlem: I’m hungry, forgotten, dejected and lost... Check out my poetry here: http://www.unknownpoets.com/db/authors/master [This message has been edited by Master (10-14-2002 01:08 AM).] |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
Master, a lot of lines I've re-read only to glean more from them and I still need to go back over it again. I especially like: ~The drops off rooftops resound like organs~ that goes off in my head...... Very powerful, deep, and gut-wrenching toward the end. I like it! Thanks, PaT ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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majnu
since 2002-10-13
Posts 1088SF Bay Area |
dark and harsh. i like the style. line 2 doesn't fit in my mind. some help there would be greatly appreciate. otherwise like the other fellow said, this is one to mull over for a little while. |
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Master Senior Member
since 1999-08-18
Posts 1867Boston, MA |
Maju.. the tower of Babel was destroyed by God because different people were trying to unite to build a tower that went up to heaven. As a result of it's destruction, the people scattered all over the world. Look it up, it's rather intersting. In the poem, it symbolizes unity or a lack there of. Thanks for the comments! |
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