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Two Short Seasonals |
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RSWells Member Elite
since 2001-06-17
Posts 2533
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LEAVING The leaves are in no hurry to unclasp. The notion makes them rust in anger, blush embarrassed, yellow in anxiety. They meander through the void away from umbilical certainty. Yet even in their naivete aware that landing splay in brown brittleness, awaiting suffocation by siblings or trampled by strangers is an ignoble end. ICING SNOW Fragile filiforms conceived of light and air far from heat, from clatter. Shining individualists so young and 60ish in anti-soar innocence. Take wing from cottoned nest in ballet flight. Your downy pageantry, airy disregard assured in brother/sisterhood, the safety of numbers. Unseen in your drafting, unknown the compact death its warm reception its ruined run. [This message has been edited by RSWells (10-29-2002 12:07 PM).] |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I especially enjoyed "Leaving"...and cannot help but disagree a little, in that their end is not futile, but only adds to next years growth as mulch as anything else...[poor pun...but what the hey, I read the poem, yes? LOL...] Thank you, Richard. Good reading.... |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Excellent poems here Mr. Wells. I too enjoyed "Leaving" the most... and the way it floated down the page.. well done poet sir. ~Hugs~ ~ Time has cast a spell on you |
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regards2you Member Elite
since 2002-10-01
Posts 3940California |
I so enjoy your poetry. It is a treat. I cannot even say these are especially good, because they all are. I thought ignoble was quite fitting, considering the magnificent specimen they were. Thanking you ever so much, Warmly, Pat ..without surrender, be on good terms with all persons.. |
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RSWells Member Elite
since 2001-06-17
Posts 2533 |
Thank you all. Ah Sunshine....made you look! I suppose the same could be said for us and our end as fertilizer. Viva la difference that your Sun shines all the brighter against my darker nature |
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Mysteria 
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Both very nice but I liked the snow one best. I love snowflakes and to relate them to a ballet, that comes to a sad ending, and lest we forget the dogs passing by  I wish the leaves had shown a different ending, as they truly are the re-birth of better things each year. I actually pick certain ones to protect and "take care" of my plants over the winter. Each leaf does indeed have a purpose - yada yada yada - nicely done Richard.  A smile costs nothing but makes someone rich. [This message has been edited by Mysteria (10-29-2002 02:10 PM).] |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
The leaves are in no hurry to unclasp. The notion makes them rust in anger, blush embarrassed, yellow in anxiety. They meander through the void away from umbilical certainty. Yet even in their naivete aware that landing splay in brown brittleness, ============================ very very cool employ of theme, imagery, color, analogy and personification, written with your unique perspective. Unknown to us, there are moments when crevices open for time to come alive with begining. |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Richard, your words always make me speechless. I love to read your work. Thanks. Love to All, Ethel |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
Two fantastic pieces...the 2nd has a depth that I know I'll have to go after with subsequent reads. The first, wow! The form is priceless for the imagery within. The intro is by far the 'graspingest' part of it: The leaves are in no hurry to unclasp. The notion makes them rust in anger, blush embarrassed, yellow in anxiety. I'm positive it won't appear on the page as yours did, how did you get the 'thing' to accept the spacing, etc? Whether on the shoal or on the shore, |
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reluctantlyme Junior Member
since 2002-10-28
Posts 34 |
Liked the 'Leaving' very much. I love Fall, though this year summer seems to have gone straight into winter, leaves still clinging to the trees. No matter how good looking she is... someone, somewhere is glad she's gone. |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (smiles) Wow!!! Oh my gosh, I love them both so much though I think "Falling" is also my favorite of the two! (big hugggssssss) Autuns harvest shines in your words, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Richard, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Richard You add a fresh look to the seasons with these beauties! |
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Denise
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since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Very well done, Richard! I enjoyed these very much! |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
short but powerful! |
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