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Time and Tide
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Time and Tide |
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esclandre Member
since 2001-06-11
Posts 62Northern California |
Time and Tide ©2002 Esclandre Allain Sat on the porch tonight, cigarette smoke obscuring the sky while thoughts defined the concrete spreading out before my feet (curled, just slightly - for comfort, of course). There's a freeway nearby, though I can't see the cars whistling down, shoving 'round the perils of darkness. But who cares about rubber and oil, gears and pollution, when I can do without it… once I figure out what it is. Knees to elbows, bent and discarded, I felt your hand touch my shoulder, yet didn't look up. I tilted my head to the sigh, however, listening to the breath you didn't blow in my ear. It gets quiet in moments like these, when you whisper from a thousand miles away and I'm left here, making love to your shadow /- but silence suits my moods like asphalt fits the tires of the cars I still don't want to speak about, but can't seem to ignore. Just as well, I suppose, when another man lies inside, curled on the bed I made this morning. His name escapes my lips just now, and turns into yours. See, I can't take you anywhere these days, because you never really left. Je le Rêve, je Pleure I dream, I cry [This message has been edited by esclandre (10-29-2002 01:10 AM).] |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
I could really, really feel the suffering in this one, lying alongside the beauty of Love's tender memories. |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Great poem and one I am sure many can identify with. The tides change over time don't they? Enjoyed this one. |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
OOOOHHH, you said a lot here that wasn't even written in the poem. You really got the old mind to wondering what was written between the lines. I'll bet, though, that is something that you "don't want to speak about, but can't seem to ignore"....just like the tires on the asphalt... Right? I thought so. Thanks for sharing your thoughts that you did "want to speak about", though. Love to All Ethel....garysgirl |
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Zinsser Senior Member
since 2001-02-27
Posts 1641Calif. |
very much enjoyed.... well done............ |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Esclandre, you should not stay away so long, as when you return, you always treat us to a  Thank you for this one... |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Esclandre~ 'It gets quiet in moments like these, when you whisper from a thousand miles away and I'm left here, making love to your shadow /-' Oh, how you touched a place I don't ever want to go back to ...~ Thank you ... this ached so lovingly~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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esclandre Member
since 2001-06-11
Posts 62Northern California |
Midnitesun: Thank you for sensing the suffering. It's dark soemtimes, but memories can bring light if you know where to look for it. Mysteria: They do, thank you for visiting and for your understanding comments. garysgirl: _smile_ Always a lot said that isn't said. You read my metaphor correctly and I appreciate that. Zinsser: Thank you. Sunshine: I never really left. I just sit in the background, watching usually. I just don't want to overload all of you with my poor poetry.  Thank you.Marge Tindal: Wow. Your reply gave me a chill. Such close association can be hard sometimes, but as you suggest, is almost always worth it as well. Thank you. Esclandre Je le Rêve, je Pleure |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggsssssss) Oh Esclandre, I could feel the tears reading this, sweet friend, my heart goes out to you and hope now true love again fulfills you as do the memories never become forgotten! (sigh) This is excellent, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Esclandre, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
yes, it had too much sadness to be just a poem. If it is true, then I hope this sadness subsides, but if it is just a poem, it is a good one, and you are a very talented poet. Yes, something to think about.... |
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