Untitled - 6/15/2002 (Another poem, another title askd for.)

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HopelessRomanticGuy
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since 2001-08-17

Posts 495
LI, New York

0 posted 2002-12-08 10:40 PM

Well, here's another one from my book of stuff. This one was written during one of my past relationships, when I realized the love was gone. It's a bit sad, and a bit odd...
To make matters worse, I realized I wasn't over my former girlfriend. I was depressed then, maybe, just a little.

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Tears run down my face
as I look into my heart,
and I know I've fallen from grace,
'Cause once again my world's fallen apart.

I was a fool then;
To think I was ready to love again.
To think myself over her.
To try and love after her.

I should've known I wasn't fine,
realized my heart needed more time,
but I was too proud to admit,
that I couldn't really take it.

And now there are two
who have entered my heart.
Two have broken through
and torn my world apart.

The one from the present,
I swear I love her so!
To love her I got full consent,
yet loving again was a mistake, I know.

As for the other, I don't know.
Why do I feel for her so?
The tense moments we share,
let me know she still cares.

I always wanted to be the knight
who carried the princess away.
Little did I know that that might,
lead me to crying as I do tonight.

"You can't hurt meee!! 'Cause I've got on my cheeeeese helmet!"

xxxnuttyangelxxx
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since 2002-12-06

Posts 72
New York

1 posted 2002-12-08 10:45 PM

You really have amazing work. I can very much relate to this poem in many ways. You have a lot of talent thank you for sharing.

shea

punkrockerrobin

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since 2001-05-15

Posts 1180
Sparks, NV

2 posted 2002-12-09 02:49 AM

WOW RICH HAVEN'T SEEN YOU IN AWHILE!! I MISS TALKIN TO YA ON AIM. ANYWAYS REALLY SAD POEM BUT I LIKED IT

you either like me for who i am or you don't like me at all

WinterWren
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since 2002-12-01

Posts 1044
...Coming to

3 posted 2002-12-09 02:47 PM

Well as usual this is a beautiful poem, and I have no idea what you should call this one.

WinterWren
"I want you to believe in life. Will you find out who you are too late, to change? -Dishwalla-

devinechild22
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since 2002-08-28

Posts 571

4 posted 2002-12-09 04:49 PM

It shows a lot when a guy isn`t afraid to cry..especially when they admit that they do. And you made such a wonderful poem! I liked it a lot.
*Allison*

Rainbowdust
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since 2002-12-05

Posts 320
Sydney, Australia

5 posted 2002-12-09 08:47 PM

I'm hopeless with titles Rich, but I'll have a think about this one and let you know if I come up with anything! I've been in similar places before as well and it's rough... I hope things are better for you now!

The soul would have no rainbows, had the eyes no tears.

WindSong
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since 2002-12-23

Posts 313
Long Island, New York

6 posted 2003-01-09 10:06 AM

Nice poem! I'm just reading some "old" stuff. Good job...ttys..........~*~Me~*~

*Mistakes are made, you pay for them, then you do it again.*
~*~Love doesn't make the world go 'round, it just makes the ride worthwhile~*~

rxyfxy04
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since 2002-11-26

Posts 54
lil' town in Virginia

7 posted 2003-01-10 10:16 PM

whoa.. that was really good.. i could relate to that sooo much.. after me and my boy broke up i thought i was ready to move till i tried then realized it was a mistake to try.. but anyways.. i hope things work out for you and mmmm.. about a title .. maybe "realization" since you wrote this one after you "realized" you werent really over her.. just an idea.. keep up the writing!!

RxyFxy04

jeffwillett
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since 2003-01-04

Posts 86
Texas, US

8 posted 2003-01-10 11:06 PM

very good, i won't say i can relate because that's what basically everyone else says so im thinking it's sorta implied

vlraynes
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since 2000-07-25

Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...

9 posted 2003-01-15 12:44 PM

Rich~
I just love reading your poetry, and this is no exception.
You always put so much heart into your writing
and it definitely shows. I could feel the emotions
in this as I read.
I'm not really sure about a title for this,
but 'Knight Fall' did come to mind...just an idea.
I very much enjoyed this, Rich..nicely penned.
~Vicky
"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

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