Crazy World--(title suggestions?)

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Teen Poetry #6

Crazy World--(title suggestions?)

xxxnuttyangelxxx
Member

since 2002-12-06

Posts 72
New York

0 posted 2002-12-08 10:17 PM

People change,
and nothing lasts
I find myself living in the past

Memories fade,
and life burns out,
it leaves me with an empty head and many doubts

Things happen,
and we don't know why,
So many people living in lies

Everything in life happens for a reason,
thats just somthing Ive come to belive in

Everything changes,
and one day you'll see,
that life is whatever you make it to be

[This message has been edited by xxxnuttyangelxxx (12-08-2002 10:18 PM).]

WinterWren
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since 2002-12-01

Posts 1044
...Coming to

1 posted 2002-12-08 10:31 PM

That was such a wonderful poem. I can relate to it sooo well, and Im sure alot of other people can too. That one's definitly going in my library. How about "Everything Changes" for a title?

WinterWren
"I want you to believe in life. Will you find out who you are too late, to change? -Dishwalla-

Stinky Twinkie
Member

since 2002-11-26

Posts 204
Dinwiddie

2 posted 2002-12-08 10:34 PM

nutty, I like that one a lot. It's so true too. The title should be "Kool Aid". Just kidding, I dont know about the title. Fantabulistic!

-Stinky Twinkie-

xxxnuttyangelxxx
Member

since 2002-12-06

Posts 72
New York

3 posted 2002-12-08 10:37 PM

thanks so much! Ive never had anyone every really read my work. It makes me happy to hear such nice things . thank you

Rainbowdust
Member

since 2002-12-05

Posts 320
Sydney, Australia

4 posted 2002-12-09 08:23 PM

Another great poem... the only thing I could suggest is to possibly be more specific and illustrate what you're saying with some imagery or examples.

Then again, short and sweet is often best so I'll just shut up before I dig myself into a hole! Hehe... keep writing!

The soul would have no rainbows, had the eyes no tears.

Riley

Senior Member

since 2002-07-18

Posts 1038
in the pouring rain

5 posted 2002-12-09 09:14 PM

Ok, I am going to try and abide by your critique message....lets see, not so sure I liked the short short lonnnnng line thing you got going. It was good and all, but they short short loonnnnngg thing threw me off entirely(Sp)..but anywho...good poem..

Riley

Morning mist clings to my face, and my soul opens up to you......

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