a moment like this (forever)

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Teen Poetry #6

a moment like this (forever)

devinechild22
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since 2002-08-28

Posts 571

0 posted 2002-09-22 10:54 PM

i feel your warmth in my arms
my heart beats to the same pitter patter as yours
i breathe with the same steadiness as u
i tear rolls down my cheek as i realize this moment
cannot last forever
i want to be a part of u always and forever
why does time travel so quickly?
it takes our loved ones o so fast
this moment will stay in my mind and heart and soul
even when i can be with u no more
so just make this moment last
grasp it as long as u can
cause a moment like this doesn`t last......
forever

Masked Intruder

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since 1999-05-23

Posts 1231
Near golden sunsets

1 posted 2002-09-23 12:12 PM

They never do.

Local Parasite

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since 2001-11-05

Posts 2527
Transylconia, Winnipeg

2 posted 2002-09-23 02:41 AM

I think this is my favourite of yours so far. You obviously spent time revising this, tweaking it a bit to make sure all the Is were dotted and the Ts were crossed.

It does a lot for a poem to just look it over a few times.

Great work.

Parasite

Learn to place poetry before people
Before you place your poetry before the people.
~Andrey Kneller

PoeticGoddessOfDepression
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since 2002-07-02

Posts 439
I am everywhere

3 posted 2002-09-23 08:49 PM

Aw... how depressing.

It's sad with someone (anyone) realizes that nothing ever lasts forever.

...life sucks.

Best of luck for tomorrow with.. him.

(this reminds me of cathy...

plus i needed an excuse to put this somewhere.)

Life of a simple man, taught that everyone else is dirty, and thier love is meaningless... oh, i'm so soiled.

(mudvayne)

devinechild22
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since 2002-08-28

Posts 571

4 posted 2002-09-23 10:07 PM

tinparasite- i usually don`t look over my poems because i think that if i do that it won`t be truly what i`m feeling. if i try to change it so that it sounds better or something i feel it won`t be from the heart. i usually just write it then submit it. i have np wit people that do check them it`s just my opinion....
sara- that little thingy is sooooooo funny where`d u get that??? lol anyway....thank u for your replies everybody

DancinQueen

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since 2000-07-29

Posts 1092
Kokomo,IN,USA

5 posted 2002-09-24 03:37 PM

*sigh* i HATE that! but excellent excellent poem

Kiley

**You can't always trust the people you want to**

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